第一篇：2016年中考作文分析

2016年河南省中招語文試卷作文題目解析

1、題目：我的青春里有——

2、材料：

畫家費盡心力創作了一幅畫，在即將完成時，不小心將一桶滴油墨滴在畫上，他沮喪極了，想要放棄這幅畫，冷靜下來后，他反復變轉角度看那個墨跡，隨后，在墨跡上涂了幾筆，墨跡變成了一只飛鳥，與整幅畫完美融合。

點評題目一：我的青春里有——

這個作文題是很常規的記敘文，還是寫人寫事的文章，也是學生常寫的話題，可以補充填上自己認為較容易寫的內容。如補上“自信”、“堅強”等詞語，有的考生往往填上一些消極、不健康的內容，給半命題作文帶來了一些負面作用，自然也降低了作文的品位。如考生在橫線上填了“打麻將”、“抽煙”、“喝酒”等詞語，讓人瞠目結舌，甚為困惑。因此，寫作時不能憑一時的感情沖動，或是標新立異，填寫上一些消極、不健康的內容，而應填寫積極向上，反映青少年時代風貌的健康內容。

也不要把題目擬得過大，難以寫出情真意切的佳作來。如果把題目補為《我的青春里有大自然》、《我的青春里有名著》，對于這樣大的題目，文章容易寫得空泛、籠統，難以寫出真情實感。所以，在補題的時候盡量把題目具體化，貼近自己的生活實際。

點評題目二：材料作文

首先需要審題。從立意上看，我們認為以下幾種立意屬于準確地理解材料，應判切合題意，內容項在一檔打分。

(一)人要從不利走向有利，就要依靠自己永不放棄的精神。

(二)人要從失誤的陰影中走出來，就需要聰明過人的智慧、靈活變通地思維、高超絕妙的技藝。

(三)成功往往有其偶然性，但更有其必然性。

其中

（一）（二）兩點可同時采用，也可從任意一個或幾個角度立意。

以下幾種立意屬于較準確地理解材料，應判符合題意，內容項在二檔打分。

(一)做人不能被失誤打倒。

(二)要戰勝困難才能成功。

(三)挫折不可怕，戰勝挫折才能成功。

這幾類立意只是抓住了材料的表面現象，而沒有深入理解裁縫成功的根本原因，因此在內容只評為二類。

以下立意屬于對材料的理解存在一點偏差，應判基本符合題意，內容項在三檔打分。

(一)創新塑造成功。

(二)天生我材必有用。

其次是確定題材。個人認為這則材料作文寫成議論文好寫些。

相關材料：

一位裁縫在吸煙時不小心將一條高檔裙子燒了一個窟窿這，致使其成了廢品。這位裁縫為了挽回損失，憑借其高超的技藝，在裙子四周剪了許多窟窿，并精心飾以金邊，然后，將其取名為“金邊鳳尾裙”。不但賣了好價錢，還一傳十，十傳百，使不少女士上門求購，生意十分紅火。

第二篇：中考作文分析

九年級中考作文指導

典型例句 1.one +of + 形容詞最高級+ 名詞復數One of the biggest events in China in 2008 is that the earthquake happened in WenChuan.2.It's our duty to do sthIt's our duty to help them.3.As….as possibleWe shoud help them as much as possible.4.here be...Here are lots of things we can do.5.We shoud keep calm instead of being afraid.6.make +sb+ 形容詞It makes many people homeless.7.too …..to They are too young to look after themselves

一、健康問題（熱點）健康問題是中考常考的話題，出題形式多樣，有必要下苦功掌握。典型例句 1.It is very important to keep healthy。2.How can we keep healthy?3.We can't go to sleep too late.We can't get up too late。

4.We should eat the food healthily。5.We should do more exercise。6.Last Tuesday I got a cold and had a pain in my head。

7.I didn't feel like eating anything。8.I decided to see the doctor。9.In the doctor's office, the doctor looks over me carefully。

10.The doctor asked me to take the medicine three times a day。

11.A few days later, I felt better.From then on I believe that keeping healthy is the most important thing in the world。例文

1、簡要介紹一下如何才能保持健康，并展開想象，適當發揮。參考答案： All of us want to be healthy.First，we should get enough sleep during the night.We can go to bed early and get up early.Staying up late is bad for our health.Second, we must have the right kinds of food.We should eat more fruit and vegetables and less meat.We should drink a lot of water.We should have healthy eating habits.Third, we should do more exercise to build up our bodies.Finally, we should wash hands before meals and brush our teeth twice a day.If we don’t feel well, we should go to see the doctor at once.2.衛生健康飲食:健康一直是人們關注的問題我校要舉行以“關愛健康”為題的主題班會,寫一篇80字左右的演講槁。保持健康的重要性，保持健康的方法，保持健康的結論，1.多吃水果蔬菜保持飲食平衡避免含糖高脂肪高的食物2.多鍛煉健身強體;3.鄙棄不良習慣，(你的看法?)，How to stay our health /fit?范文 Dear boys and girls :

Here is my advice about how to keep health? Today many teenagers are unhealthy，because they do less exercise eat more junk food isn’t enough time to sleep.If we keep fit we must keep taking exercises every day.Eat lots of fruit and vegetables.Sleep for about 8 hours a night.Stay away from drugs.Early to bed early to get up.Breathe the fresh air in the open air.you’d better do more exercise such as playing ball games running swimming and jumping rope(繩子).Then you should pay attention to your diet or meals，Don’t eat too much meat and sugar but more vegetables and fruit.Third you need enough sleep or rest.Next，keep yourself happy.As people often say smiling makes younger.Last you mustn’t drink wine or

smoke.They are bad for your health.Keep happy every day.That is my advice.I hope you are healthy and enjoy your life.3、根據中英文提示，寫出內容完整、意思連貫、符合邏輯的稿件。有寫學生不愛吃學校的午飯，常到校外去吃他們所喜歡吃的食物。但有些食物并不利于他們的身體健康。請你準備一篇討論稿，談談你的看法和建議。范文：We know that some of our students do not like eating lunch at school because the food isn’t delicious.So they often go out of school to buy something they like to eat.But I’m afraid it’s bad for their health to eat lunch outside because some of the food they buy isn’t healthy enough.In my opinion, if our schools want more students to be back and enjoy lunch inside, they should make the food more delicious, and also they should offer our students a larger choice of food as well.二、關于環境保護問題（熱點）環境保護問題是中考熱門話題，難度較大，必須掌握。典型句子 1.It’s our duty to save wate 2.As we know , water is very important to man,3.we can’t live without water.4.But some people don’t care about it.5.The amount of water which is suitable to drink is less and less.6.Many rivers and lakes are polluted.Something must be done to stop the pollution.7.It's our duty to protect our environment。

8.It is very important to take care of our environment

9.We shouldn’t throw litter on to the ground10.We should not spit in a public place11.We should plant more flowers and trees。

12.We must pick up some rubbish and throw it into a dustbin

13.If everyone makes contribution to protecting the environment, the world will become much more beautiful。14.Trees are very helpful and important for us.15.We should plant more and more trees in order to live better and more healthy in the future.It’s everyone’s duty to love and protect the environment.、6月5日(June 5)是世界環境保護日，我們周圍的環境變得越來越糟糕，污染越來越嚴重??。假如你是學生Jone.，你校要進行“如何保護我們的環境?”演講比賽，要求：

1、舉例說明環境存在的問題

2、如何保護好我們的環境，采取怎樣的措施，舉例說明，字數80左右。Dear headmasters,teachers,classmates and friends:

I’m very proud that I have chosen to speak to you all today, I’m a bit nervous as I’ve never made a speech before to so many people ,so please forgive me if it shows.As we all know,the environmemt around us is getting worse and worse.In some places we can’t see fish swimming in the river or trees on the hills.Some people even have no clean water to drink.So I think we must do something to protect the environment..But what can we do? How to protect our environmemt ?For example ,we can go to school on foot or by bike.we can use shopping basskets not plastic bags.when we go shopping and we can use both sides of the paper when we write.In a word ,if everyone pays more attention to our environment ,there will be

less pollution and our life will be better.“There is only one earth”,I hope everyone will protect our environment well.Thanks!

4、保護環境。從2008年6月1日起，國家將禁止商家免費提供塑料袋，掀起全國“拒塑”的環保運動。假如你是李華，準備以“What Can We Do for the Environment”為題，寫一篇保護環境的英語演講稿。參考作文：What Can We Do for the EnvironmentHello, everyone.I’m Li Hua.It’s nice to speak about what we can do for the environment, and I think each of us can do a little bit to help with this problem.The first thing we can do is to use cloth bags in stead of plastic bags when we go shopping.It helps to protect the environment.The second thing we can do is to reuse the old textbooks as possible as we can.We should also never forget to turn off the lights when we leave the classrooms in order to save energy.What’s more, it would be better if we walk or ride a bike to school.We should try our best reduce pollution and waste.In fact, even the simplest everyday activities can make a real difference to the environment.I believe we can make the world a better place to live in.Thank you for your listening!

5.環境問題：今天環境變得越來越糟糕,環境問題影響著人們的工作,學習,生活等,而我們的工作,生活,生產等又使環境污染越來越嚴重..,如何保護我們的環境?請以“ How to protect/save our environment/world? ”為題寫一篇短文。提示:存在問題:1.水污染越來越嚴重2.砍伐森林嚴重3.大氣污染嚴重 4.白色垃圾等。要求：如何改善/保護環境? 80字左右的。范文： How to protect/save our environment/world?

The environmental pollutionis worse and worse /more and more seriouslytoday.Water is polluted ,we have nocleanwater todrinkMany trees are cutting down, some animals is getting less and less.Somefactories is poring dirtyair in the sky , the populationis increasing faster and faster ,resources is getting less and less…etc.Not only does it affect our lives and health, it also has a greataffectionin thefuture.people's health has been greatly affected by air, noise and water pollution.Many people died of diseases.In order to live a better life, we need protect ourworld.We shouldn’t throw away rubbish everywhere.We want to recycle ,reduce ,reusethings.Don’t waste things ,This saves money and reduces pollution.Use things for as long as possible.We don’t useplastic bags.We must plant more trees and stop the people cutting them.We hopeour world is more andmore beautiful.6.為了保護地球有限的資源，我們應該采取什么措施呢？請根據下面的提示寫一篇約80詞的短文，短文開頭已經給出。提示詞；1.save water, the source of life , protect drinking water, stop polluting, make full use of it；2.save electricity, crucial, turn off, other electric machines；3.save forests, useful ,stop cutting down；4.recycle useful rubbish, save resources 參考作文：

Although the world develops much faster and better, the resources on the earth get fewer and fewer.In order to protect them, something must be done.Save water.Water is the source of life.No water, no life.So it’s very important for us to do so.Not only should we protect drinking water and stop polluting it, but also make full use of it.Save electricity.It is crucial.We can’t imagine what the life will be like without it.Everyone should do his best to save electricity.Don’t forget to turn off lights or other electric machines when we finish working.Save forests.They are useful.Please stop cutting them down and use recycled paper instead.Make our world a green one to live in.Recycle useful rubbish.Plenty of rubbish can be recycled like cans, paper, bottles, and so on.We can save resources in this way.三、語言學習,這是中考中的老話題，形式多樣。典型例句 1.My favorite subject is English。2.More than three quarters of the information on the Internet is in English。3.It is used by travelers and business people all over the world。

4.China has joined the WTO and the Olympic Games will be held in China.English becomes more and more useful。

5.So English is very important and I like English very much。6.We have a lot of fun in the English class。

7.Our English teacher often makes us happy in the English class。

8.I hope I can go abroad one day, and then I can speak to foreigners in English。9.I like English and try my best to learn it。

例文Ellen看到大家都對自己的未來充滿期待，感到特別高興。為了鼓勵大家學好英語，他準備出一期英語學習經驗交流專刊。請根據以下問題和答案的提示并結合你的實際情況，以“My English Learning”為題寫一篇80詞左右的英文稿件，要求至少涉及其中的三個問題，并且不能出現你的真實姓名、校名和縣名等。提示： When did you start learning English?(in ? /?years ago)How do you learn English?(listen carefully, study with a group, read English every day…)What is difficult to learn?(listening, grammar…)What other helpful ways do you know to learn English well?(watch English movies, sing English songs…)參考作文： English is one of my best subjects and I started learning English when I was ten years old.But at the very beginning, listening seemed a little difficult for me.So I have been doing a lot of listening practice, such as listening to tapes, watching English TV programs.And I found it really helped a lot.In fact, there are some more helpful ways to learn English well.For example, I enjoy singing English songs and I want to join an English club or find a pen pal from English-speaking countries.I believe that nothing is impossible if you put your heart into it.2、假設你叫李華，你的英國筆友Linda為了來中國參觀奧運會而報名參加漢語培訓班學習漢語。她最近寫信向你詢問學習外語的建議。請根據提示和你學習英語的體會給Linda寫一封回信。注意:1．回信要包括全部要點；2．開頭和結尾已給出,不計入總詞數 3．字數60左右。參考作文： Dear Linda，I’m very glad that you’ll come to China to watch the Olympic Games.I know it isn’t

easy to learn a foreign language, but I have some ideas that may help.Firstly, it’s very important to listen to the teacher carefully in class and make some notes so that you can go over your lessons later.Secondly, try to catch every chance to practice speaking, both in and out of class.Don’t be afraid of making mistakes.Then try to listen and read more in Chinese.What’s more, you’d better plan your time well and study it regularly every day.Above all, you should be confident in yourself and don’t give up whenever you meet with difficulty.I’m sure you will succeed through your hard work.Best wishes and looking forward to meeting you in China.Yours,Li Hua

四、興趣與愛好（熱點）興趣愛好是中考常考話題，1、介紹你的興趣愛好My HobbyI am a 15-year-old student in junior Grade 3.Though I am occupied with my study, I would like to spend time on my hobbies, such as playing the piano, surfing the Internet.One of my favourite hobby is reading.Reading has been in my life for many years, since I began to learn characters.It can not only kill the time, but also, more important, help improve my comprehension ability.When reading, I can learn a lot.Reading Shakespear's works, I know how Hamlet looks like.Reading Scorates, I can see how great ancient Greek philosophers are.Reading Lu Xu, I come back to the old time of China.Reading really affect my life.2、我的愛好（My hobby）Choose one of your hobbies and write an article for the school magazine about it.Tell the magazine readers.?What exactly your hobby is;?When and how you became interested in this hobby;?Why you enjoy your hobby;?About your hopes and plans for the future.寫作要求： 1.根據所提供的內容，適當拓展想象空間，靈活地將提供的信息體現在文章中。2.條理清楚，語句通順，書寫清晰、規范。3.詞數60-80.My hobby is reading books When I was seven years old.I became interested in reading books.I like needing books because there are a lot of useful things in books.I can learn a lot of knowledge from books.Bookscan also teach me how to be a good person.Books even can solve many problems for me.I will read more good books to improve myself.五、寫人記事篇 ,這是中考出項頻率最高的話題，其特點是難度相對較小，學生都有話可寫，但掌握一些基本句子和模仿范文對奪取高分非常必要。典型例句

1.His name is Jack。2.He was born in London in 1982。

3.He is 1.68 meters tall and weighs 52 kilos。4.He is 20 years old。5.He comes from England。6.He is a good ping-pong player。7.He is medium build。8.He has short hair。

9.He is outgoing.Every one likes to talk with him.He gets on well with us。

10.He teaches English very well.11.He works hard.He works in No.5 Middle School。12.He loves watching football games after work。13.He often helps me with my English。14.At the age of six, he began to play football

例文

1、假如你是李華，你從報紙上看到2008北京奧運會志愿者的招聘廣告。請你用英文寫封

簡短的應聘信，介紹自己的情況（見下表）表示愿意為奧運會做一些工作，請組委會給予考慮，并能盡早予以答復，詞數：80左右。姓名：李華，年齡： 16。簡歷 ： 我市某中學學生。愛好 ：繪畫、體育、唱歌、演講、英語口語。獲獎情況 ：2007年12月獲我市中學生英語演講比賽一等獎 身體狀況：健康。聯系電話： 0594--1356666。提示詞匯：1.志愿者voluteer2.作為work as3.答復reply to4.比賽contest

Sir/Madam,I read your ad.in the newspaper yesterday.I’m writing to tell you that I’d like to work as a volunteer for the 2008 Beijing Olympics.My name is Li Hua.I’m sixteen.I have many hobbies, such as drawing, sports, singing, speeches, and spoken English.I am proud that I won the first prize in our city’s English Speech Contest for Middle School Student in December, 2007.In fact I’m healthy and strong.If I am lucky enough to become a volunteer, I will try my best to do this job well.Please reply to me soon.My telephone number is 0594—1356666.Yours sincerely

Li Hua3.、回顧初中三年成長過程，你一定有很多感受，從學習，生活，愛好等方面作出自我評價(畢業 回顧評價)I have studied in my middle school for three years.I have learned a lot.I have learned not only how to make friends but also how to talk to others.I have many hobbies.I like sports.I often play basketball, football and volleyball with my friends.Football is my favorite.Of all my subjects, I do best in English and Chinese.But my math and physics are a little weak.I think I will try my best to learn them well.I hope I can study in No.1 High School.旅游和介紹地方篇（熱點）中考高頻率話題，出題形式靈活。典型例句

1.Last Sunday(Saturday,…),it was sunny(rainy, windy, foggy,)

2.I got up very early(late).After breakfast I went to ?with my friends by bike 3.We enjoyed ourselves。4.We forgot the time.We didn't come back until 5 o'clock。5．Wefelt very tired, but we were happy6.I thought I would never forget this trip。7.Last summer, my parents and I went to Beijing for our holidays。8.We visited a lot of places of interest。9.We had a good time there。10.We bought a lot of things.The clothes here are good and cheap。

4、請你用英語為劉公島寫一篇題為Welcome to Liu Gong Island 的旅游宣傳材料。要點： 劉公島概況威海東部，島長4.08km，寬1.5km, 面積：3.15km2, 距陸地船程20 分鐘，花草樹木覆蓋，歷史博物館、動物園等景點，水、陸環島游等活動 交通方式 ：（來威海）汽車、火車、飛機等，交通便利。瀏覽時間： 一天 ,要求：1.包括以上要點，但不拘泥于其順序，適當使用描繪性語言，展示劉公島魅力。2.詞數100 詞左右（已給出的開頭、結尾不計入詞數）。Welcome to Liu Gong Island

The summer vacation is coming.Where would you like to visit? Haven’t you decided?

Come to Liu Gong Island!Liu Gong Island is in the east of Weihai, which has an area of 3.15km2.It is 4.08 km long, 1.5km wide.It will take you 20 minutes to get the island from the travel port by ship.The history museum on the island is educational.The zoo is interesting to visit.And it is more interesting to travel around the island either on land or by boat.There are all kinds of trees and grass everywhere.It’s very easy to travel to Weihai.You can come by bus, by train, or by plane.You can spend a day happily on the island.It is a good place to visit.Visitors from all over the world come to visit it every year.Wish you a good trip.六、新生事物評價（熱點），需要學生掌握方法，和基本句式，以做到考試時心中不亂。典型例句 1.Computer is becoming more and more important

2.we should make good use of it.3.It maybe get in the way of our study.4.We can do lots of things with it。5.It makes our life more easy

6.Nowadays mobile phones are becoming more and more popular among the middle school students.例文

1、網上購物Doing Shopping Online

With the help of the Internet, shopping is not a difficult job.Just click your mouse to choose the article you like, and the shopping is finished.You needn't step out of the room.It seems easy and quick.But there's always a trap online.If you are careless, it will bring you some trouble.You may find the color of the article is different from what you want, or the size is either too small or too big.If you want to be different, you'd better not buy clothes online.Once you put on the clothes you bought online and go out, you will find many people wear the same clothes in the street.2、關于中學生使用手機 贊成意見：1.現在是信息社會，手機是最快的信息交流工具之一。2.應充分利用好手機。如偶遇突發事故，可立即撥打手機求助。3.可在每天學習之余利用手機游戲放松一下自己。4.只要正確使用好手機，緊跟時間并無過錯，追求時尚可以理解，但學習是首要任務。反對意見：1.學校已提供了公共電話，因此手機并不能帶來更多的方便，而且花費較多。2.若課堂接聽手機會影響上課。3.學生玩手機游戲或接發短信，將無法集中精力學習。注意：1.可適當增加細節和連接詞，使文章通順連貫；開頭部分已給出，不計入總詞數；2.詞數：80左右；參考作文：

Nowadays mobile phones are becoming more and more popular among the middle school students.In my opinion, we can bring mobile phones to school.As we know, the 21st century is a modern age and full of information.A mobile phone is one of the quickest tools for us to exchange information.The mobile phone is a fashionable and useful invention, so we ought to make the best use of it.Suppose there’s a sudden accident, it is more convenient for us to dial for help immediately.There’re also some games in the mobile phone.We can relax ourselves by playing them when we’re tired of our studies.In my opinion, it’s not wrong to follow the fashion, but the most important thing is how to use the mobile phone in a right way.1.我的夢想是當一名醫生(my dream is doctor)： I am an ordinary person, I have an ordinary dream: Is a doctor.Because doctor may let these experience personally the human which the indisposition suffers to get rid of the pain.May let the human change the health.At the same time, I believed that, will help others, own also to be able to obtain joyfully.Therefore, I hoped future I might be a doctor.2.以后十年內我的生活(MY LIFE IN TEN YEARS)In ten years,I think I 'll be a reporter.I wiil live in an apartement with my sister.Because I don't like living alone.And I can play with her inth aparement.So in ten years,I willba a good reporter.I will meet a lot of interesting and faous people and I willgo to another places on business.In ten years,i will have many different pets.Maybe I will keep a pet turtle.I think I will go shopping with my sister as long as I have time.And I will go to london on my vacation.So,my life in ten years will be better and better!

七、煩惱篇 這類作文難度較大，掌握基本句式，背誦范文非常必要。典型例句

1.I am sorry to hear that……2.you shoud learn to forget…… 3.you had better……4 you shoud learn to relax5.you can ask your teacher for help例文，假如你是Han Mei, 下面是一封你的筆友Alice 給你發來的e-mail,請你根據e-mail 的內容給她寫一封回信，與她交流看法，并幫她排憂解難。提示詞語：listen to, mother's love, care about, communicate with, get along with, smileDear Han Mei,I'm afraid I've got a big problem recently.My mother talks too much to me.She always tells me, “Be careful while crossing the street.” “Put on more clothes.” “Did you do a good job at school?” and so on.I'm annoyed(煩惱)。What shall I do?AliceDear Alice,As a teenager, I met the same problem as you.But now I can get along better with my mother.Here are some ideas for you.Your mother talks much, because she cares about you.Maybe it's not a good way, but it shows your mother's love.So I think you should listen to her.If your opinions are different from your mother's, you can communicate with her, and tell her what you are thinking about.If your mother doesn't take your advice, just keep silent and give her a smile.I hope what I say here can help you a lot.

第三篇：中考作文分析

作文庫大全小升初 中考滿分 高考滿分 高考零分 2013廣西南寧中考作文分析【真題點擊】作文。（50分）親愛的同學，十年后的你，會是啥樣？能否成為最好的自己？去問問你的人生際遇，興趣愛好，更要去問問你的青春志向，和你為之付出的青春汗水??請從下面兩道作文題中，任選一題，完成作文。題一：以“十年后，與最好的自己相遇”為題，寫一篇作文。題二：以“致十年后的自己”為題，寫一封信。要求：（1）文中不能出現真實的人名、校名和地名。寫信一律稱自己為“寧寧”。（2）除詩歌外，文體不限，字數在600字以上。（3）選擇題二，要符合書信格式。【真題破解】2013年繼續沿用了二選一的模式，但都是命題作文。這樣的考題，一是考學生對人生的規劃，二是考查學生的想像力，三是選材空間大。這個作文題是對未來的一種設計，緊扣“中國夢”，是對未來自己的期許，屬于青春勵志教育類。兩個文題相似，但《十年后與最好的自己相遇》是站在未來的角度，去寫一個未來的自己，而《致十年后的自己》則是站在現在的角度，寫信給未來的自己，落腳點有所不同。如果審題不仔細，將前一個題目落在現在的自己要如何努力，很可能會寫偏題。這兩個作文題雖然讓學生有話可說，但很容易寫得散、寫虛，真正寫好也并不容易。尤其是《致十年后的自己》，寫信便于抒情，但不易突出中心思想，并且要求按書信的格式，把自己稱為“寧寧”，如果學生寫信的格式不對，也會被扣分。總之這個文題就是要學生大膽想像，漫無邊際，可以聯系生活，也可以借助事物，表達情感。甭管是奇思還是異想，不管是不是合理，只要能自圓其說即可。寫給十年后的自己李興海李興海：你好！這個書面問候，使我想了很久。我不知道自己是該寫展信佳呢，還是該寫hello，直到深夜躺在床上，才忽然決定用“你好”這個傳統而又老套的禮貌用語。我之所以用這個老套的詞語，無非是想看看，此刻的你是否還如我現在一般桀驁叛逆，敢于摒棄一切老套的封建詞句。我的文學老師說，當你看到這封信時，你一定會捧腹大笑，繼而禁不住熱淚盈眶。我想，他是錯的，畢竟，我們還沒那么矯情。你知道嗎？我有多渴望長大。現在才凌晨一點鐘，母親就來催了三次，問我明天還想不想上學。你看，我的生活就是這樣，不但一塌糊涂，還總是被家長和老師們所禁錮。你現在還喜歡看書寫字嗎？還是不是每次寫作文都要把后半部分一直擴展到試卷背面？數學成績是不是依舊爛得慘不忍睹？還敢不敢在大街上唱歌？還會不會無視學校規定，自己給自己放假？這些問題，其實都不是我最想要問的。我最想知道的答案，就是現在你有沒有結婚，以及結婚的對象是不是冉冰潔？你不知道我有多喜歡冉冰潔，但我想，她一定不會喜歡我。我現在那么矮，那么丑，成績那么差，除非有一天我長高了，變帥了，成為一名優秀的作家了，她才有可能接受我。我給她寫了一封情書，但遲遲沒有郵寄出去。我生怕這封熱情洋溢的信件，會讓我愛情 友情兩者同失。因此，我想問問十年后的你，那封信，此刻去了哪里？它有沒有幫你博得冉冰潔的傾慕？還有啊，要是你真沒和冉冰潔結婚的話，就不用給我回信了。天知道，我收到這個消息之后會干出什么傻事兒來。前幾天我還和我的死黨發誓呢，要是我娶不到冉冰潔的話，下半輩子就給他做牛做馬。如果你現在還有和這個死黨聯系的話，趁早斷了吧，免得他哪日心血來潮忽然想起這個誓言，并且執意要你兌現。你有沒有去普羅旺斯？千萬別告訴我，十年后的你尚且沒有去過普羅旺斯。那是我現在最大最大的夢想。聽說，那里有全世界最廣袤的薰衣草種植基地，每逢春夏，便會漫山遍野地綻開紫色的薰衣草，無邊無際，把天上的每一只昆蟲都熏染得渾身附帶著濃烈的香氣。還有，我要告訴你一個秘密。在學校背后的西山上面，有一棵千年子母樹，子母樹的旁邊有一塊巨大的望山石，我把這些年寫的日記都埋在了望山石的腳下，如果你還能找到它們的話，就當我送給你的禮物吧。最后，我想問你一個問題。長大后的你，真的幸福嗎？快樂嗎？ 【得分點透視】1.捕捉細節，才思敏捷。全文取材于自己的真實生活，從身邊具體的事件寫起，妙趣橫生，才華橫溢。比如問未來的自己初戀是否成功，情書到哪里去了，有沒有去過普羅旺斯等，顯得才思機智，幽默風趣。2.真情實感，言之有物。在與未來的自己對話時，作者沒有泛泛而談，而是把那個未

來的自己當作多年未見的老朋友，仿佛他就坐在自己對面，作者像久別重逢一樣地與之交流，侃侃而談，從稱呼，到想像中對方收到信的情景，到一連串的個人問題，描寫細致入微，生動有趣。有一天，我走在一條幽靜的小路上，當我正在為還有太多的作業沒有完成而煩惱時，一股無形的力量把我向后吸了過去。我連連倒退三步，趕忙抓住路邊的一棵小樹，怎奈那力量實在太強了，我漸漸感到力不從心。只聽“咔嚓”一聲，小樹被折斷了，斷了的樹枝重重的敲在了我的頭上，我頓時眼前一黑，便失去了知覺。不知過了多久，我終于醒來了。我發現自己躺在了一條馬路上，一名報童正對著我笑。“要買報嗎？”報童問我。“買。”我便掏錢買了一份報紙，一看報上的時間，我不禁嚇了一跳——2009年12月25日，我頓時懵了。難道我穿越時空了，來到了2019年的世界？再看一眼報紙，讓我更為吃驚。“偉大的科學家何涵春首次開啟了時空隧道，并解開了恐龍之謎”。何涵春？這不是我的名字嗎》難道十年后的我成了科學家？種種疑問頓時涌上心頭。強烈的好奇心驅使我去找這位與我同名同姓的偉大人物。經過一番努力，我們終于見面了。在他了解了我的情況后，急忙跑下來迎接，還抱著我說：“你就是十年前的我呀！我正想著去十年前接你呢，誰料到你會掉進時空黑洞啊！你現在要好好學習，刻苦鉆研，長大后才能成為像我這樣偉大的科學家。”聽著他對我的期望，再回過頭看看自己對學習的態度——作業不認真寫，還老是偷懶，我感到羞愧萬分，當即立志要成為一名偉大的科學家。之后，我還參觀了他的實驗室。啊！真是太漂亮了，科學用具應有盡有。看著那富麗堂皇的實驗室，我越來越想當一名科學家了。最后，他把我送回了家。到家后，我認真的完成了作業，并努力地向科學家一步步邁進！遇見十年后的自己我是一個愛做夢的人，在心理課堂的引導下，我正暢游于那個脫離現實的世界里。如果遇見了十年后的自己??我會和“他”一起沿田野散步，迎著沁人的花香、草香??享受著涼爽的清風，向“自己”追問著“自己”。“在未來對我過得好嗎？生活怎么樣，有考上一所名牌大學嗎？有沒有一位善良、美麗的妻子??”我想把這十年內可能發生的事情全部問了個遍。他看著我：“也許我來是為了滿足你的好奇心，其實不然，我是來告訴你，未來的路坎坷卻又寬闊。當你失望時，其實就能看見希望。要相信自己，要幸福快樂，不要氣餒，做一個有靈魂、有思想的人。另外，我也想來休息一下，放松 放松。”我和他又沉默地走在這田野間，迎著微風，聞著清香。??我是個愛幻想的人。如果遇見十年后的自己，我會詢問夢想是否會成功；如果遇見十年后的自己，我會仔細端詳“自己”的面容；如果遇見十年后的自己，我會什么也不說，只和他靜靜散步于田野間??我的夢想，不需要十年后自己的告知，只要從這一刻起，腳踏實地的去實現“它”——我的人生，我的夢想！致十年后的我時光匆匆而過，孩童時的童真就這樣度過，當初那十五歲的小女生如今已長大 了，成熟了，懂事了。她學會了承擔，她有了奮斗的目標，而這些，似乎就只在眨眼之間。嗨！十年后的我，初次對你寫信，我的心情是無法用我那貧乏的語言來表達的，是很復雜的，有些興奮，有期待，又有些害怕。我有好多好多的問題想問你，有許多許多的話語無法用語言來表達??。十年后的我，你現在過的怎么樣呢？幸福嗎？你是否還堅持著十年前那成為漫畫家，小說家的夢想？這個夢想在十年后有實現了嗎？還是早已經將它遺忘了呢？只是有了一份平平凡凡的工作，過著平平淡淡的日子？更不會是在哪場考試中落榜，上不了大學而正不知如何是好的尋找工作，過著窮苦潦倒的生活呢？爸媽們還好嗎？你有讓他們過上好的生活，健健康康的嗎？他們還如十年前這般的年輕與高大嗎？還是已經是白發蒼蒼了呢？十年的時間，足以改變太多太多了，這十年間你可曾因為當初的某個決定而后悔過。因為當初的那次貪玩兒懊惱過？還是遇見了什么改變了你一生的事？對這些的答案我都十分的期待，可在這期待中同樣隱藏著一份害怕與不安。害怕從你口中蹦不拿一件件不如意的事。十年前的你，對自己的未來充滿了迷惑與困惑，雖然心中有個小小的理想，可對這個理想搖擺不定，有著沖向理想時的害

怕?。還記得嗎？十年前你的夢想是成為個漫畫家，小說家。十年前的你對這個理

想充滿了渴望，卻又害怕，害怕自己沖向這個理想后的失敗。害怕作品沒被選上后 的后悔?。我對未來的一切的一切充滿了迷漫，就像船兒在海上，茫茫大霧中航行，找不著方向。我希

望這時候有個羅盤，來告訴我正確的方向，帶著我在大霧中航行，直至找到出口，抵達終點。十年后的我，你能告訴我該怎么辦嗎？來當我的羅盤，指引我前進的方向。十年后的我，在如今，你回想起兒時那一件件在那時看起來很大的煩惱，如今是否覺得甚是渺小，想起十年前的某些舉動，如今是否會覺得甚是好笑十年后的我，你可還記得我們在十年前定下的那個約定？如今，你可有再遇過當初的那些同學與老師？那些當初讓你恨得牙癢癢的某個同學，某些事，現在回想起來是否會覺得風清云淡。時光飛逝，人生路漫漫??。

你還好嗎？十年后的我2013年4月15日葉兒隨風飄落，黃色的梔子花緩緩落下，在空中飛蕩，十年后的我，

第四篇：2016濟南中考作文分析

2016年濟南中考作文題目淺析

硝煙已盡，中考落幕。一場牽動幾萬家庭的考試大戰在喧囂中結束。本次中考，可謂“幾家歡喜幾家憂”。語文考試作文沒有用考前樣題中的“題目+開頭”的形式，讓不少同學舒了一口氣。但《共度好時光》這個題目真的那么簡單嗎？今天我們來看一下。

1、《共度好時光》這個題目，是我們考前講解的五大類題目中的“動賓短語”題目。這類題目在寫作之前，首先要注意寫作對象的確定：和誰/什么共度好時光？選材的方向不僅僅局限在寫人上，我們備考的特長愛好、故鄉、游歷、小人物等文章都可以轉化。這個“共度”的對象，可以說是沒有太大的限制。

2、許多同學只是簡單的一分析和誰共度之后，就開始將自己的備考作文套用。這是不對的。這篇文章的題目雖然簡單，但是有潛在的限制。因為我們要關注“怎么樣”共度？是寫一個時間段的刻畫？是寫幾個小畫面連綴？還是寫眼前引回憶再回憶......將共度的形式和意義寫出來，是這篇文章與其他同學寫出區別的一個主要的點。例如我們可以寫自己的愛好（書法），這里可以寫這樣一個過程：初識之時興趣盎然，開始一段美好時光——慢慢相知，時光都變成了氤氳著墨香的時光——深入了解，墨香不僅僅帶來成就、榮譽，更讓你的情懷得到升華，這美好的時光，必將成為你成長的美麗風景。

3、“好時光”的要求很明顯，要形成一個完整的畫面。但這里一定要注意，“好時光”明顯不是一個簡單的時間點，它是包含了時間、地點、人物的面的刻畫。而且這里的“好時光”含義不要人為的變窄了——什么是好？感動、溫暖是好，成長變化是好，溫馨舒適是好。助人為樂是好，沉浸于寧靜快樂是好，知錯能改是好，陪伴相助是好，游覽大好河山是好，輕撫琴弦是好，綠茵場上馳騁也是好......不要簡單地把“好”等同于快樂溫暖。否則選材撞車的可能性太大。

4、這里要統一一種認識：中考作文題目越是簡單，得分區分度就越小。同水平的同學很難拉開檔次。那么，完全圍繞著考場優秀作文的標準寫一篇優秀的作文就成了擺在同學們面前的一大難題。精益求精成了作文中考備考的一個重要的提升點。建議同學們，尤其是初三銜接的同學們仔細審視自己的文章，找到自己作文問題，做好文章修改、備考！

假期，陰老師和你相約！共同備考作文！明年中考，必勝！

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第五篇：2013濟南中考作文分析

初一期末考試作文分析

一、中考作文分析《定格在記憶中的畫面》

1、關鍵詞分析：

（1）“定格”——這是一個限定，說明我們寫作的事件在我們的記憶中影響深刻，就像相機的鏡頭拍攝照片一樣清晰，一樣難忘。同時，“定格”一詞也從側面表現出我們文中應該有對這個事件的細致刻畫，只有細致，才能難以忘懷。

（2）“記憶”——這是對文體的一個提示，提示我們寫的是一篇回憶性的文章，可以是記憶中的親情、友誼、師生情、人間真情、自然美景后的感悟、一種寄托在某個事物中的回憶（月光）等。可以用“觸景生情引出回憶”的方法開頭，可以用題記開頭，可以用“先聲奪人”的聲音開頭。

（3）“畫面”——很明顯提醒我們寫作中應該有畫面的描寫，即“環境+人物+抒情”，巧妙地運用修辭，將上述三者完美的融合在一起。既然是畫面，那么我們展現的就應該是一個能夠觸動我們的事件，在這個事件中，如詩如畫、讓人行動的某個場景深深的觸動了我們的心靈。在這里，不要忘記感情的變化，一篇沒有情感及其變化過程的文章，不能成為一篇好的考場作文，多層次、多角度、多次出現心理活動的描寫，才能寫出真正的在腦海中記憶深刻的畫面。

2、選材的新角度

（1）可以寫一件家庭生活中的小事，凸顯親情：今年中考的特殊性，它是在端午節當天開始考試，那么，我們是不是可以將端午節早上出門時母親或者父親特定的一個畫面寫出來呢，比如那《悠悠的粽香》，比如那為我祈福的艾草（以前從未插過艾草的母親，今年卻插了艾草，我并不喜歡它的味道，直到出門時，才從母親口中得知她的目的，母親那溫馨的眼神，定格在了我的腦海之中），比如那一絲不茍的、虔誠的為車子機上綠絲帶的父親??（待補充）

（2）可以寫校園生活，凸顯友情、師生情或者美好的回憶：前幾天，高中的孩子聚會，將我們幾個老師請去，一塊聊天，一塊回憶，一塊拍照，一天的時間在快樂中匆匆而過，那種對自己美好過去的懷念與追憶，讓人心中禁不住泛起層層的漣漪，這個溫馨而炫麗的畫面，在我腦海中久久揮之不去，你的記憶中，有沒有這種已經分離的師生相聚的畫面呢？也許是《黑板上的記憶》、《幾分愧疚在心頭》等校園故事的再現；也許是你在操場上、運動場上永遠無法忘記的一抹身影（那個陪著你跑到終點的人）等等。

（3）可以寫日常生活中的普通人，寫出人與人之間的溫馨：可以寫這樣一個畫面，早上下樓，樓下的這在整理雜物的阿婆向我高聲問候，走到小區門口，傳達大叔一邊開門一邊向我微笑，走出小區，早早出攤的阿姨也為我祝福，三個人物，三個畫面，定格在腦海之中，樸素的話語，真摯的情感，讓我深深的感動。（或者三種微笑）

（4）可以寫在游歷或者平常看到的難忘的自然景觀：那在流淌的途中，面對峭壁選擇了傲然聳立的瀑布；那在絕壁之上、貧瘠的土壤之中，毅然成長的松樹；那在鄉村的田野，遍地開放的無名的野花；那長白山頂峰，遮擋了美景的迷霧等等。

3、文章布局上的方法

（1）寫人記事，關鍵是方法要到位，比如欲揚先抑，比如倒序插敘，比如觸景生情，比如伏筆鋪墊，比如前后對比，比如側面的襯托，比如聯想比喻，比如一波三折，比如多次再現，比如過渡銜接，比如單獨成段，比如多次扣題，比如首尾呼應，比如借物喻人等等。

（2）要想寫出難忘，必須對讓你難忘的點寫的淋漓精致，那么文中就應該有一段或以上細致的刻畫或者描寫。