第一篇:中考作文分析
九年級中考作文指導
典型例句 1.one +of + 形容詞最高級+ 名詞復數One of the biggest events in China in 2008 is that the earthquake happened in WenChuan.2.It's our duty to do sthIt's our duty to help them.3.As….as possibleWe shoud help them as much as possible.4.here be...Here are lots of things we can do.5.We shoud keep calm instead of being afraid.6.make +sb+ 形容詞It makes many people homeless.7.too …..to They are too young to look after themselves
一、健康問題(熱點)健康問題是中考常考的話題,出題形式多樣,有必要下苦功掌握。典型例句 1.It is very important to keep healthy。2.How can we keep healthy?3.We can't go to sleep too late.We can't get up too late。
4.We should eat the food healthily。5.We should do more exercise。6.Last Tuesday I got a cold and had a pain in my head。
7.I didn't feel like eating anything。8.I decided to see the doctor。9.In the doctor's office, the doctor looks over me carefully。
10.The doctor asked me to take the medicine three times a day。
11.A few days later, I felt better.From then on I believe that keeping healthy is the most important thing in the world。例文
1、簡要介紹一下如何才能保持健康,并展開想象,適當發揮。參考答案: All of us want to be healthy.First,we should get enough sleep during the night.We can go to bed early and get up early.Staying up late is bad for our health.Second, we must have the right kinds of food.We should eat more fruit and vegetables and less meat.We should drink a lot of water.We should have healthy eating habits.Third, we should do more exercise to build up our bodies.Finally, we should wash hands before meals and brush our teeth twice a day.If we don’t feel well, we should go to see the doctor at once.2.衛生健康飲食:健康一直是人們關注的問題我校要舉行以“關愛健康”為題的主題班會,寫一篇80字左右的演講槁。保持健康的重要性,保持健康的方法,保持健康的結論,1.多吃水果蔬菜保持飲食平衡避免含糖高脂肪高的食物2.多鍛煉健身強體;3.鄙棄不良習慣,(你的看法?),How to stay our health /fit?范文 Dear boys and girls :
Here is my advice about how to keep health? Today many teenagers are unhealthy,because they do less exercise eat more junk food isn’t enough time to sleep.If we keep fit we must keep taking exercises every day.Eat lots of fruit and vegetables.Sleep for about 8 hours a night.Stay away from drugs.Early to bed early to get up.Breathe the fresh air in the open air.you’d better do more exercise such as playing ball games running swimming and jumping rope(繩子).Then you should pay attention to your diet or meals,Don’t eat too much meat and sugar but more vegetables and fruit.Third you need enough sleep or rest.Next,keep yourself happy.As people often say smiling makes younger.Last you mustn’t drink wine or
smoke.They are bad for your health.Keep happy every day.That is my advice.I hope you are healthy and enjoy your life.3、根據中英文提示,寫出內容完整、意思連貫、符合邏輯的稿件。有寫學生不愛吃學校的午飯,常到校外去吃他們所喜歡吃的食物。但有些食物并不利于他們的身體健康。請你準備一篇討論稿,談談你的看法和建議。范文:We know that some of our students do not like eating lunch at school because the food isn’t delicious.So they often go out of school to buy something they like to eat.But I’m afraid it’s bad for their health to eat lunch outside because some of the food they buy isn’t healthy enough.In my opinion, if our schools want more students to be back and enjoy lunch inside, they should make the food more delicious, and also they should offer our students a larger choice of food as well.二、關于環境保護問題(熱點)環境保護問題是中考熱門話題,難度較大,必須掌握。典型句子 1.It’s our duty to save wate 2.As we know , water is very important to man,3.we can’t live without water.4.But some people don’t care about it.5.The amount of water which is suitable to drink is less and less.6.Many rivers and lakes are polluted.Something must be done to stop the pollution.7.It's our duty to protect our environment。
8.It is very important to take care of our environment
9.We shouldn’t throw litter on to the ground10.We should not spit in a public place11.We should plant more flowers and trees。
12.We must pick up some rubbish and throw it into a dustbin
13.If everyone makes contribution to protecting the environment, the world will become much more beautiful。14.Trees are very helpful and important for us.15.We should plant more and more trees in order to live better and more healthy in the future.It’s everyone’s duty to love and protect the environment.、6月5日(June 5)是世界環境保護日,我們周圍的環境變得越來越糟糕,污染越來越嚴重??。假如你是學生Jone.,你校要進行“如何保護我們的環境?”演講比賽,要求:
1、舉例說明環境存在的問題
2、如何保護好我們的環境,采取怎樣的措施,舉例說明,字數80左右。Dear headmasters,teachers,classmates and friends:
I’m very proud that I have chosen to speak to you all today, I’m a bit nervous as I’ve never made a speech before to so many people ,so please forgive me if it shows.As we all know,the environmemt around us is getting worse and worse.In some places we can’t see fish swimming in the river or trees on the hills.Some people even have no clean water to drink.So I think we must do something to protect the environment..But what can we do? How to protect our environmemt ?For example ,we can go to school on foot or by bike.we can use shopping basskets not plastic bags.when we go shopping and we can use both sides of the paper when we write.In a word ,if everyone pays more attention to our environment ,there will be
less pollution and our life will be better.“There is only one earth”,I hope everyone will protect our environment well.Thanks!
4、保護環境。從2008年6月1日起,國家將禁止商家免費提供塑料袋,掀起全國“拒塑”的環保運動。假如你是李華,準備以“What Can We Do for the Environment”為題,寫一篇保護環境的英語演講稿。參考作文:What Can We Do for the EnvironmentHello, everyone.I’m Li Hua.It’s nice to speak about what we can do for the environment, and I think each of us can do a little bit to help with this problem.The first thing we can do is to use cloth bags in stead of plastic bags when we go shopping.It helps to protect the environment.The second thing we can do is to reuse the old textbooks as possible as we can.We should also never forget to turn off the lights when we leave the classrooms in order to save energy.What’s more, it would be better if we walk or ride a bike to school.We should try our best reduce pollution and waste.In fact, even the simplest everyday activities can make a real difference to the environment.I believe we can make the world a better place to live in.Thank you for your listening!
5.環境問題:今天環境變得越來越糟糕,環境問題影響著人們的工作,學習,生活等,而我們的工作,生活,生產等又使環境污染越來越嚴重..,如何保護我們的環境?請以“ How to protect/save our environment/world? ”為題寫一篇短文。提示:存在問題:1.水污染越來越嚴重2.砍伐森林嚴重3.大氣污染嚴重 4.白色垃圾等。要求:如何改善/保護環境? 80字左右的。范文: How to protect/save our environment/world?
The environmental pollutionis worse and worse /more and more seriouslytoday.Water is polluted ,we have nocleanwater todrinkMany trees are cutting down, some animals is getting less and less.Somefactories is poring dirtyair in the sky , the populationis increasing faster and faster ,resources is getting less and less…etc.Not only does it affect our lives and health, it also has a greataffectionin thefuture.people's health has been greatly affected by air, noise and water pollution.Many people died of diseases.In order to live a better life, we need protect ourworld.We shouldn’t throw away rubbish everywhere.We want to recycle ,reduce ,reusethings.Don’t waste things ,This saves money and reduces pollution.Use things for as long as possible.We don’t useplastic bags.We must plant more trees and stop the people cutting them.We hopeour world is more andmore beautiful.6.為了保護地球有限的資源,我們應該采取什么措施呢?請根據下面的提示寫一篇約80詞的短文,短文開頭已經給出。提示詞;1.save water, the source of life , protect drinking water, stop polluting, make full use of it;2.save electricity, crucial, turn off, other electric machines;3.save forests, useful ,stop cutting down;4.recycle useful rubbish, save resources 參考作文:
Although the world develops much faster and better, the resources on the earth get fewer and fewer.In order to protect them, something must be done.Save water.Water is the source of life.No water, no life.So it’s very important for us to do so.Not only should we protect drinking water and stop polluting it, but also make full use of it.Save electricity.It is crucial.We can’t imagine what the life will be like without it.Everyone should do his best to save electricity.Don’t forget to turn off lights or other electric machines when we finish working.Save forests.They are useful.Please stop cutting them down and use recycled paper instead.Make our world a green one to live in.Recycle useful rubbish.Plenty of rubbish can be recycled like cans, paper, bottles, and so on.We can save resources in this way.三、語言學習,這是中考中的老話題,形式多樣。典型例句 1.My favorite subject is English。2.More than three quarters of the information on the Internet is in English。3.It is used by travelers and business people all over the world。
4.China has joined the WTO and the Olympic Games will be held in China.English becomes more and more useful。
5.So English is very important and I like English very much。6.We have a lot of fun in the English class。
7.Our English teacher often makes us happy in the English class。
8.I hope I can go abroad one day, and then I can speak to foreigners in English。9.I like English and try my best to learn it。
例文Ellen看到大家都對自己的未來充滿期待,感到特別高興。為了鼓勵大家學好英語,他準備出一期英語學習經驗交流專刊。請根據以下問題和答案的提示并結合你的實際情況,以“My English Learning”為題寫一篇80詞左右的英文稿件,要求至少涉及其中的三個問題,并且不能出現你的真實姓名、校名和縣名等。提示: When did you start learning English?(in ? /?years ago)How do you learn English?(listen carefully, study with a group, read English every day…)What is difficult to learn?(listening, grammar…)What other helpful ways do you know to learn English well?(watch English movies, sing English songs…)參考作文: English is one of my best subjects and I started learning English when I was ten years old.But at the very beginning, listening seemed a little difficult for me.So I have been doing a lot of listening practice, such as listening to tapes, watching English TV programs.And I found it really helped a lot.In fact, there are some more helpful ways to learn English well.For example, I enjoy singing English songs and I want to join an English club or find a pen pal from English-speaking countries.I believe that nothing is impossible if you put your heart into it.2、假設你叫李華,你的英國筆友Linda為了來中國參觀奧運會而報名參加漢語培訓班學習漢語。她最近寫信向你詢問學習外語的建議。請根據提示和你學習英語的體會給Linda寫一封回信。注意:1.回信要包括全部要點;2.開頭和結尾已給出,不計入總詞數 3.字數60左右。參考作文: Dear Linda,I’m very glad that you’ll come to China to watch the Olympic Games.I know it isn’t
easy to learn a foreign language, but I have some ideas that may help.Firstly, it’s very important to listen to the teacher carefully in class and make some notes so that you can go over your lessons later.Secondly, try to catch every chance to practice speaking, both in and out of class.Don’t be afraid of making mistakes.Then try to listen and read more in Chinese.What’s more, you’d better plan your time well and study it regularly every day.Above all, you should be confident in yourself and don’t give up whenever you meet with difficulty.I’m sure you will succeed through your hard work.Best wishes and looking forward to meeting you in China.Yours,Li Hua
四、興趣與愛好(熱點)興趣愛好是中考常考話題,1、介紹你的興趣愛好My HobbyI am a 15-year-old student in junior Grade 3.Though I am occupied with my study, I would like to spend time on my hobbies, such as playing the piano, surfing the Internet.One of my favourite hobby is reading.Reading has been in my life for many years, since I began to learn characters.It can not only kill the time, but also, more important, help improve my comprehension ability.When reading, I can learn a lot.Reading Shakespear's works, I know how Hamlet looks like.Reading Scorates, I can see how great ancient Greek philosophers are.Reading Lu Xu, I come back to the old time of China.Reading really affect my life.2、我的愛好(My hobby)Choose one of your hobbies and write an article for the school magazine about it.Tell the magazine readers.?What exactly your hobby is;?When and how you became interested in this hobby;?Why you enjoy your hobby;?About your hopes and plans for the future.寫作要求: 1.根據所提供的內容,適當拓展想象空間,靈活地將提供的信息體現在文章中。2.條理清楚,語句通順,書寫清晰、規范。3.詞數60-80.My hobby is reading books When I was seven years old.I became interested in reading books.I like needing books because there are a lot of useful things in books.I can learn a lot of knowledge from books.Bookscan also teach me how to be a good person.Books even can solve many problems for me.I will read more good books to improve myself.五、寫人記事篇 ,這是中考出項頻率最高的話題,其特點是難度相對較小,學生都有話可寫,但掌握一些基本句子和模仿范文對奪取高分非常必要。典型例句
1.His name is Jack。2.He was born in London in 1982。
3.He is 1.68 meters tall and weighs 52 kilos。4.He is 20 years old。5.He comes from England。6.He is a good ping-pong player。7.He is medium build。8.He has short hair。
9.He is outgoing.Every one likes to talk with him.He gets on well with us。
10.He teaches English very well.11.He works hard.He works in No.5 Middle School。12.He loves watching football games after work。13.He often helps me with my English。14.At the age of six, he began to play football
例文
1、假如你是李華,你從報紙上看到2008北京奧運會志愿者的招聘廣告。請你用英文寫封
簡短的應聘信,介紹自己的情況(見下表)表示愿意為奧運會做一些工作,請組委會給予考慮,并能盡早予以答復,詞數:80左右。姓名:李華,年齡: 16。簡歷 : 我市某中學學生。愛好 :繪畫、體育、唱歌、演講、英語口語。獲獎情況 :2007年12月獲我市中學生英語演講比賽一等獎 身體狀況:健康。聯系電話: 0594--1356666。提示詞匯:1.志愿者voluteer2.作為work as3.答復reply to4.比賽contest
Sir/Madam,I read your ad.in the newspaper yesterday.I’m writing to tell you that I’d like to work as a volunteer for the 2008 Beijing Olympics.My name is Li Hua.I’m sixteen.I have many hobbies, such as drawing, sports, singing, speeches, and spoken English.I am proud that I won the first prize in our city’s English Speech Contest for Middle School Student in December, 2007.In fact I’m healthy and strong.If I am lucky enough to become a volunteer, I will try my best to do this job well.Please reply to me soon.My telephone number is 0594—1356666.Yours sincerely
Li Hua3.、回顧初中三年成長過程,你一定有很多感受,從學習,生活,愛好等方面作出自我評價(畢業 回顧評價)I have studied in my middle school for three years.I have learned a lot.I have learned not only how to make friends but also how to talk to others.I have many hobbies.I like sports.I often play basketball, football and volleyball with my friends.Football is my favorite.Of all my subjects, I do best in English and Chinese.But my math and physics are a little weak.I think I will try my best to learn them well.I hope I can study in No.1 High School.旅游和介紹地方篇(熱點)中考高頻率話題,出題形式靈活。典型例句
1.Last Sunday(Saturday,…),it was sunny(rainy, windy, foggy,)
2.I got up very early(late).After breakfast I went to ?with my friends by bike 3.We enjoyed ourselves。4.We forgot the time.We didn't come back until 5 o'clock。5.Wefelt very tired, but we were happy6.I thought I would never forget this trip。7.Last summer, my parents and I went to Beijing for our holidays。8.We visited a lot of places of interest。9.We had a good time there。10.We bought a lot of things.The clothes here are good and cheap。
4、請你用英語為劉公島寫一篇題為Welcome to Liu Gong Island 的旅游宣傳材料。要點: 劉公島概況威海東部,島長4.08km,寬1.5km, 面積:3.15km2, 距陸地船程20 分鐘,花草樹木覆蓋,歷史博物館、動物園等景點,水、陸環島游等活動 交通方式 :(來威海)汽車、火車、飛機等,交通便利。瀏覽時間: 一天 ,要求:1.包括以上要點,但不拘泥于其順序,適當使用描繪性語言,展示劉公島魅力。2.詞數100 詞左右(已給出的開頭、結尾不計入詞數)。Welcome to Liu Gong Island
The summer vacation is coming.Where would you like to visit? Haven’t you decided?
Come to Liu Gong Island!Liu Gong Island is in the east of Weihai, which has an area of 3.15km2.It is 4.08 km long, 1.5km wide.It will take you 20 minutes to get the island from the travel port by ship.The history museum on the island is educational.The zoo is interesting to visit.And it is more interesting to travel around the island either on land or by boat.There are all kinds of trees and grass everywhere.It’s very easy to travel to Weihai.You can come by bus, by train, or by plane.You can spend a day happily on the island.It is a good place to visit.Visitors from all over the world come to visit it every year.Wish you a good trip.六、新生事物評價(熱點),需要學生掌握方法,和基本句式,以做到考試時心中不亂。典型例句 1.Computer is becoming more and more important
2.we should make good use of it.3.It maybe get in the way of our study.4.We can do lots of things with it。5.It makes our life more easy
6.Nowadays mobile phones are becoming more and more popular among the middle school students.例文
1、網上購物Doing Shopping Online
With the help of the Internet, shopping is not a difficult job.Just click your mouse to choose the article you like, and the shopping is finished.You needn't step out of the room.It seems easy and quick.But there's always a trap online.If you are careless, it will bring you some trouble.You may find the color of the article is different from what you want, or the size is either too small or too big.If you want to be different, you'd better not buy clothes online.Once you put on the clothes you bought online and go out, you will find many people wear the same clothes in the street.2、關于中學生使用手機 贊成意見:1.現在是信息社會,手機是最快的信息交流工具之一。2.應充分利用好手機。如偶遇突發事故,可立即撥打手機求助。3.可在每天學習之余利用手機游戲放松一下自己。4.只要正確使用好手機,緊跟時間并無過錯,追求時尚可以理解,但學習是首要任務。反對意見:1.學校已提供了公共電話,因此手機并不能帶來更多的方便,而且花費較多。2.若課堂接聽手機會影響上課。3.學生玩手機游戲或接發短信,將無法集中精力學習。注意:1.可適當增加細節和連接詞,使文章通順連貫;開頭部分已給出,不計入總詞數;2.詞數:80左右;參考作文:
Nowadays mobile phones are becoming more and more popular among the middle school students.In my opinion, we can bring mobile phones to school.As we know, the 21st century is a modern age and full of information.A mobile phone is one of the quickest tools for us to exchange information.The mobile phone is a fashionable and useful invention, so we ought to make the best use of it.Suppose there’s a sudden accident, it is more convenient for us to dial for help immediately.There’re also some games in the mobile phone.We can relax ourselves by playing them when we’re tired of our studies.In my opinion, it’s not wrong to follow the fashion, but the most important thing is how to use the mobile phone in a right way.1.我的夢想是當一名醫生(my dream is doctor): I am an ordinary person, I have an ordinary dream: Is a doctor.Because doctor may let these experience personally the human which the indisposition suffers to get rid of the pain.May let the human change the health.At the same time, I believed that, will help others, own also to be able to obtain joyfully.Therefore, I hoped future I might be a doctor.2.以后十年內我的生活(MY LIFE IN TEN YEARS)In ten years,I think I 'll be a reporter.I wiil live in an apartement with my sister.Because I don't like living alone.And I can play with her inth aparement.So in ten years,I willba a good reporter.I will meet a lot of interesting and faous people and I willgo to another places on business.In ten years,i will have many different pets.Maybe I will keep a pet turtle.I think I will go shopping with my sister as long as I have time.And I will go to london on my vacation.So,my life in ten years will be better and better!
七、煩惱篇 這類作文難度較大,掌握基本句式,背誦范文非常必要。典型例句
1.I am sorry to hear that……2.you shoud learn to forget…… 3.you had better……4 you shoud learn to relax5.you can ask your teacher for help例文,假如你是Han Mei, 下面是一封你的筆友Alice 給你發來的e-mail,請你根據e-mail 的內容給她寫一封回信,與她交流看法,并幫她排憂解難。提示詞語:listen to, mother's love, care about, communicate with, get along with, smileDear Han Mei,I'm afraid I've got a big problem recently.My mother talks too much to me.She always tells me, “Be careful while crossing the street.” “Put on more clothes.” “Did you do a good job at school?” and so on.I'm annoyed(煩惱)。What shall I do?AliceDear Alice,As a teenager, I met the same problem as you.But now I can get along better with my mother.Here are some ideas for you.Your mother talks much, because she cares about you.Maybe it's not a good way, but it shows your mother's love.So I think you should listen to her.If your opinions are different from your mother's, you can communicate with her, and tell her what you are thinking about.If your mother doesn't take your advice, just keep silent and give her a smile.I hope what I say here can help you a lot.
第二篇:中考作文分析
作文庫大全小升初 中考滿分 高考滿分 高考零分 2013廣西南寧中考作文分析【真題點擊】作文。(50分)親愛的同學,十年后的你,會是啥樣?能否成為最好的自己?去問問你的人生際遇,興趣愛好,更要去問問你的青春志向,和你為之付出的青春汗水??請從下面兩道作文題中,任選一題,完成作文。題一:以“十年后,與最好的自己相遇”為題,寫一篇作文。題二:以“致十年后的自己”為題,寫一封信。要求:(1)文中不能出現真實的人名、校名和地名。寫信一律稱自己為“寧寧”。(2)除詩歌外,文體不限,字數在600字以上。(3)選擇題二,要符合書信格式。【真題破解】2013年繼續沿用了二選一的模式,但都是命題作文。這樣的考題,一是考學生對人生的規劃,二是考查學生的想像力,三是選材空間大。這個作文題是對未來的一種設計,緊扣“中國夢”,是對未來自己的期許,屬于青春勵志教育類。兩個文題相似,但《十年后與最好的自己相遇》是站在未來的角度,去寫一個未來的自己,而《致十年后的自己》則是站在現在的角度,寫信給未來的自己,落腳點有所不同。如果審題不仔細,將前一個題目落在現在的自己要如何努力,很可能會寫偏題。這兩個作文題雖然讓學生有話可說,但很容易寫得散、寫虛,真正寫好也并不容易。尤其是《致十年后的自己》,寫信便于抒情,但不易突出中心思想,并且要求按書信的格式,把自己稱為“寧寧”,如果學生寫信的格式不對,也會被扣分。總之這個文題就是要學生大膽想像,漫無邊際,可以聯系生活,也可以借助事物,表達情感。甭管是奇思還是異想,不管是不是合理,只要能自圓其說即可。寫給十年后的自己李興海李興海:你好!這個書面問候,使我想了很久。我不知道自己是該寫展信佳呢,還是該寫hello,直到深夜躺在床上,才忽然決定用“你好”這個傳統而又老套的禮貌用語。我之所以用這個老套的詞語,無非是想看看,此刻的你是否還如我現在一般桀驁叛逆,敢于摒棄一切老套的封建詞句。我的文學老師說,當你看到這封信時,你一定會捧腹大笑,繼而禁不住熱淚盈眶。我想,他是錯的,畢竟,我們還沒那么矯情。你知道嗎?我有多渴望長大。現在才凌晨一點鐘,母親就來催了三次,問我明天還想不想上學。你看,我的生活就是這樣,不但一塌糊涂,還總是被家長和老師們所禁錮。你現在還喜歡看書寫字嗎?還是不是每次寫作文都要把后半部分一直擴展到試卷背面?數學成績是不是依舊爛得慘不忍睹?還敢不敢在大街上唱歌?還會不會無視學校規定,自己給自己放假?這些問題,其實都不是我最想要問的。我最想知道的答案,就是現在你有沒有結婚,以及結婚的對象是不是冉冰潔?你不知道我有多喜歡冉冰潔,但我想,她一定不會喜歡我。我現在那么矮,那么丑,成績那么差,除非有一天我長高了,變帥了,成為一名優秀的作家了,她才有可能接受我。我給她寫了一封情書,但遲遲沒有郵寄出去。我生怕這封熱情洋溢的信件,會讓我愛情 友情兩者同失。因此,我想問問十年后的你,那封信,此刻去了哪里?它有沒有幫你博得冉冰潔的傾慕?還有啊,要是你真沒和冉冰潔結婚的話,就不用給我回信了。天知道,我收到這個消息之后會干出什么傻事兒來。前幾天我還和我的死黨發誓呢,要是我娶不到冉冰潔的話,下半輩子就給他做牛做馬。如果你現在還有和這個死黨聯系的話,趁早斷了吧,免得他哪日心血來潮忽然想起這個誓言,并且執意要你兌現。你有沒有去普羅旺斯?千萬別告訴我,十年后的你尚且沒有去過普羅旺斯。那是我現在最大最大的夢想。聽說,那里有全世界最廣袤的薰衣草種植基地,每逢春夏,便會漫山遍野地綻開紫色的薰衣草,無邊無際,把天上的每一只昆蟲都熏染得渾身附帶著濃烈的香氣。還有,我要告訴你一個秘密。在學校背后的西山上面,有一棵千年子母樹,子母樹的旁邊有一塊巨大的望山石,我把這些年寫的日記都埋在了望山石的腳下,如果你還能找到它們的話,就當我送給你的禮物吧。最后,我想問你一個問題。長大后的你,真的幸福嗎?快樂嗎? 【得分點透視】1.捕捉細節,才思敏捷。全文取材于自己的真實生活,從身邊具體的事件寫起,妙趣橫生,才華橫溢。比如問未來的自己初戀是否成功,情書到哪里去了,有沒有去過普羅旺斯等,顯得才思機智,幽默風趣。2.真情實感,言之有物。在與未來的自己對話時,作者沒有泛泛而談,而是把那個未
來的自己當作多年未見的老朋友,仿佛他就坐在自己對面,作者像久別重逢一樣地與之交流,侃侃而談,從稱呼,到想像中對方收到信的情景,到一連串的個人問題,描寫細致入微,生動有趣。有一天,我走在一條幽靜的小路上,當我正在為還有太多的作業沒有完成而煩惱時,一股無形的力量把我向后吸了過去。我連連倒退三步,趕忙抓住路邊的一棵小樹,怎奈那力量實在太強了,我漸漸感到力不從心。只聽“咔嚓”一聲,小樹被折斷了,斷了的樹枝重重的敲在了我的頭上,我頓時眼前一黑,便失去了知覺。不知過了多久,我終于醒來了。我發現自己躺在了一條馬路上,一名報童正對著我笑。“要買報嗎?”報童問我。“買。”我便掏錢買了一份報紙,一看報上的時間,我不禁嚇了一跳——2009年12月25日,我頓時懵了。難道我穿越時空了,來到了2019年的世界?再看一眼報紙,讓我更為吃驚。“偉大的科學家何涵春首次開啟了時空隧道,并解開了恐龍之謎”。何涵春?這不是我的名字嗎》難道十年后的我成了科學家?種種疑問頓時涌上心頭。強烈的好奇心驅使我去找這位與我同名同姓的偉大人物。經過一番努力,我們終于見面了。在他了解了我的情況后,急忙跑下來迎接,還抱著我說:“你就是十年前的我呀!我正想著去十年前接你呢,誰料到你會掉進時空黑洞啊!你現在要好好學習,刻苦鉆研,長大后才能成為像我這樣偉大的科學家。”聽著他對我的期望,再回過頭看看自己對學習的態度——作業不認真寫,還老是偷懶,我感到羞愧萬分,當即立志要成為一名偉大的科學家。之后,我還參觀了他的實驗室。啊!真是太漂亮了,科學用具應有盡有。看著那富麗堂皇的實驗室,我越來越想當一名科學家了。最后,他把我送回了家。到家后,我認真的完成了作業,并努力地向科學家一步步邁進!遇見十年后的自己我是一個愛做夢的人,在心理課堂的引導下,我正暢游于那個脫離現實的世界里。如果遇見了十年后的自己??我會和“他”一起沿田野散步,迎著沁人的花香、草香??享受著涼爽的清風,向“自己”追問著“自己”。“在未來對我過得好嗎?生活怎么樣,有考上一所名牌大學嗎?有沒有一位善良、美麗的妻子??”我想把這十年內可能發生的事情全部問了個遍。他看著我:“也許我來是為了滿足你的好奇心,其實不然,我是來告訴你,未來的路坎坷卻又寬闊。當你失望時,其實就能看見希望。要相信自己,要幸福快樂,不要氣餒,做一個有靈魂、有思想的人。另外,我也想來休息一下,放松 放松。”我和他又沉默地走在這田野間,迎著微風,聞著清香。??我是個愛幻想的人。如果遇見十年后的自己,我會詢問夢想是否會成功;如果遇見十年后的自己,我會仔細端詳“自己”的面容;如果遇見十年后的自己,我會什么也不說,只和他靜靜散步于田野間??我的夢想,不需要十年后自己的告知,只要從這一刻起,腳踏實地的去實現“它”——我的人生,我的夢想!致十年后的我時光匆匆而過,孩童時的童真就這樣度過,當初那十五歲的小女生如今已長大 了,成熟了,懂事了。她學會了承擔,她有了奮斗的目標,而這些,似乎就只在眨眼之間。嗨!十年后的我,初次對你寫信,我的心情是無法用我那貧乏的語言來表達的,是很復雜的,有些興奮,有期待,又有些害怕。我有好多好多的問題想問你,有許多許多的話語無法用語言來表達??。十年后的我,你現在過的怎么樣呢?幸福嗎?你是否還堅持著十年前那成為漫畫家,小說家的夢想?這個夢想在十年后有實現了嗎?還是早已經將它遺忘了呢?只是有了一份平平凡凡的工作,過著平平淡淡的日子?更不會是在哪場考試中落榜,上不了大學而正不知如何是好的尋找工作,過著窮苦潦倒的生活呢?爸媽們還好嗎?你有讓他們過上好的生活,健健康康的嗎?他們還如十年前這般的年輕與高大嗎?還是已經是白發蒼蒼了呢?十年的時間,足以改變太多太多了,這十年間你可曾因為當初的某個決定而后悔過。因為當初的那次貪玩兒懊惱過?還是遇見了什么改變了你一生的事?對這些的答案我都十分的期待,可在這期待中同樣隱藏著一份害怕與不安。害怕從你口中蹦不拿一件件不如意的事。十年前的你,對自己的未來充滿了迷惑與困惑,雖然心中有個小小的理想,可對這個理想搖擺不定,有著沖向理想時的害
怕?。還記得嗎?十年前你的夢想是成為個漫畫家,小說家。十年前的你對這個理
想充滿了渴望,卻又害怕,害怕自己沖向這個理想后的失敗。害怕作品沒被選上后 的后悔?。我對未來的一切的一切充滿了迷漫,就像船兒在海上,茫茫大霧中航行,找不著方向。我希
望這時候有個羅盤,來告訴我正確的方向,帶著我在大霧中航行,直至找到出口,抵達終點。十年后的我,你能告訴我該怎么辦嗎?來當我的羅盤,指引我前進的方向。十年后的我,在如今,你回想起兒時那一件件在那時看起來很大的煩惱,如今是否覺得甚是渺小,想起十年前的某些舉動,如今是否會覺得甚是好笑十年后的我,你可還記得我們在十年前定下的那個約定?如今,你可有再遇過當初的那些同學與老師?那些當初讓你恨得牙癢癢的某個同學,某些事,現在回想起來是否會覺得風清云淡。時光飛逝,人生路漫漫??。
你還好嗎?十年后的我2013年4月15日葉兒隨風飄落,黃色的梔子花緩緩落下,在空中飛蕩,十年后的我,
第三篇:近年中考作文分析
近年中考作文分析 作文題型一直以五種形式呈現:全命題作文、半命題作文、話題作文、材料作文和選題作文。長沙市以前兩種為主。
一、2010—2013年中考作文全景掃描
(一)中考作文命題形式穩中有變,仍然以全命題作文為主體,半命題作文越來越受命題者親睞。
1、2012年
作文
(一):伸出我的手
作文
(二):在世界中的感悟
要求:詩歌除外,文體不限;不少于600字;文章中不許出現考生本人姓名及所在的相關地名;不得抄襲,要寫自己的生活經歷和感受,抒發真情實感。
點評:命題作文“伸出我的手”不是索取,而應該是給予。第二個審題的要素是注意這個題目的關鍵詞是“我”,也就是說做出給予、付出的人應該是“我”。另一個關鍵詞是“手”,我們在寫作過程中,應該注意扣題,付出、給予應該與“手”有關,或者是能夠以“手”來付出的。即使不然,也應該具有“手”的象征意義,比如“路見不平,伸手相助”,或者“路遇危難,伸手相助”。
半命題“在世界中感悟”有兩個關鍵的內容必須先加以把握,一是這個題目的核心內容是“感悟”;二是這個題目的隱含信息是有所感悟的主體是“我”。我們可以把它寫成讀后感,那它就是“在《×××》世界中的感悟”,空白處填寫名著或者作者的名字皆可;我們也可以寫成對人品的感悟,那空白處就可以填寫關于人的品格的詞語;我們還可以寫成對人生的感悟,對某一種事物的感悟等等。其實放到更加寬廣的范圍去理解,這個題目中的空白處無所不能填。
2、2011年
作文
(一):給自己一個擁抱
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(二):每個人都有自己的個性,個性也可以說是自己的一張名片,例如,豪邁奔放是蘇軾的名片,婉約清麗是李清照的名片,堅貞不屈是文天祥的名片??那么,什么是你自己的名片吶?請以“____是我的一張名片”為題寫一篇文章。
點評:第一個題目“擁抱”本意是“為表示親愛而相擁”。因此,我們可以將此處的“擁抱”設想為心靈的需求,表達自己對真情的渴望和期盼。真情類的作文尤其要注意細節描寫,要想使文章有深刻的立意,最好采用以小見大的手法來寫,這樣才能使文章內容充實,主題深刻。另外,文中不能只有空洞的呼喚和抒情,一定要有一件具體生動的事,使得文章真實感人。其實,作文之時,可選取生活中你最為心動的一個場景、印象最深的一件事、最受感動的一個細節,以 1
此來表達渴望擁抱時的心理感受,用自我獨特的情感體驗,去表現最動人的情感,這樣的文章更容易得高分。
第二個題目是半命題作文。“我”的這張名片,可選的范圍比較廣泛,如表情、精神、品質、外貌特征、個性等,都可選。為了寫好這篇半命題作文,我們3、2010年
作文
(一):送他人一朵花
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(二):你的_______,讓我記住了你
點評:命題作文“送他人一朵花”很容易想到那句“送人玫瑰,收留余香”。此題運用比喻的修辭,設題新穎形象,所以首先得選擇好要寫的具體“花”,這花,可以是人生美好的情感,也可以是嶄新思想的啟迪。寫這個文題,要注意設計一個具體的情境,這個“他人”,可以指某一個人,進而抒發某種情感,表達某種感想,也可以指一類人,進而表達自己對人生的思考。
半命題作文“你的,讓我記住了你” 這個題目落點較小,注重生活細節,文題中的第二人稱代詞“你”,讓學生倍感親切,生活化濃厚,易于抒情。可以采用記敘文、小說、散文、書信、日記、故事、童話等文體形式,做此類文題首先要調動自己生活積淀,找準那個“你”,然后選準要描繪的重點,補充完整題目。
4、2013年
作文(一)我不相信眼淚
作文(二)從另一個角度去_______(觀察 感悟 思考)
【要求】(1)若選題目二,須先從“觀察”“感悟”“思考”三個詞語中選擇一個,將題目補充完整,然后作文;
點評:作文題目和往年一樣緊扣高考,由學生二選一寫作。全命題作文《我不相信眼淚》,半命題作文《從另一個角度去______(觀察 感悟 思考)》。一個培養學生的情感,一個注重學生的思維鍛煉,角度有差異,但都能喚起學生的共鳴,讓他們有話可說,寫出新意。
一般來說,眼淚是挫折、困難的代言詞,因此作文題《我不相信眼淚》意在培養學生形成堅強的品格,讓學生從戰勝挫折、困難的角度,緊扣自己的生活實例。“學生一般都會結合自己在生活、學習中遇到的困難,都有話可寫。”謝利純說。
每個人看待事情時都有不同的角度,用不同的立場去思考,因而半命題作文《從另一個角度去______(觀察 感悟 思考)》更多的是引導學生遇事用不同的角度去思考,培養創新思維能力。可以大膽地嘗試采用各種創新體裁,如采用童話、寓言、小說等文學體裁構思。
(二)命題者全面關注考生的心理健康、成長經歷、生活感悟、人生體驗、習慣養成等多方面的生活積累,貼近考生實際,讓考生有話可說,有事可寫,鼓勵考生“說真話、實話、心里話,不說假話、空話、套話”。
主要體現在以下五個方面:
1.以“青春成長”為解讀話題,引導考生展現自我、審視自我。
這類作文題常以全命題作文和半命題作文的形式呈現,主要有兩種情況:一是展示青春風采。二是感悟成長啟示。
2.以“感動感恩”為寫作內容,引導考生體察冷暖、感悟真情。
學會感動,學會感恩,是學生成長過程中必須要培養的情感。如果仔細觀察和用心體悟身邊的人或事,就有說不完的話,寫不盡的事,素材如長江之水,滾滾而來。
3.以“洞察身邊”為取材范疇,引導考生關注社會、辯證思考。
4.以“情趣體悟”為感情基調,引導考生袒露內心、品味生活。
如2012年湖南長沙的作文題:我們每個人都有許多自己的世界,比如,愛音樂的,有自己的音樂世界;愛籃球的,有自己的籃球世界:愛網絡的,有自己的網絡世界……如果仔細思考這些世界背后的價值與意義,你也許會對它有更深的感悟與體會。請以“在世界中的感悟”為題寫一篇文章。
(三)中考作文評價包含著五個方面的要素,即立意、內容、結構、語言、書寫,并按這五個方面所呈現的不同層次來附分。了解這五個方面的要求有助于我們平時的訓練和備考。
要想獲得高分作文,我們要關注以下六個方面的要素:
①內容充實,切合題意②主題鮮明,思想健康
③結構嚴謹,條理清楚④語言流暢,有感染力
⑤書寫工整,文面美觀⑥形式創新,文采飛揚
(二)2014年中考作文備考策略
那么,中考中,我們如何讓作文得高分呢? 我們要從兩個角度來做準備:
1.從評價要素的角度做訓練準備。
2.從題型磨合的角度做訓練準備。
我們的中考作文訓練大多采用了整體訓練的模式,即四個層次。一是全程訓練,即從審題、構思、立意、選材、表達等角度逐一進行訓練。二是局部訓練,即從文章的開頭、結尾、細節刻畫開展訓練。三是創新訓練,加強對構思立意的“精”、“深”、“活”、“新”等方面的訓練,力求讓人有耳目一新的感覺。四是速度訓練,從快速審題、快速構思、、快速布局、快速行文等方面養成“快”
3的習慣。在這四個層次的訓練中,穿插“青春”、“成長”、“感恩”等各類主題的訓練。經過這一輪訓練之后,學生對作文的整個過程有了比較清晰地了解,作文能力有了大幅度提升。接下來,就應該進行題型磨合訓練。
下面簡單談談兩類題型的應對技巧。
(1)全命題作文,要注意四點:
①審好題。題目中的修飾語是文章表意的重心,我們要把握好;題目中的限制語確定了文章的取材范疇,我們要思謀清楚;如果文章的題目過于簡單和抽象,我們要用添加前后綴的方式豐富題目,找到寫作的重點和素材;如果文章的題目是一些帶有比喻或者象征意義的題目,我們則可以挖掘出本體和喻體、象征體之間的關系,化“虛”為實、以實寫“虛”。
②定好體。一般是寫記敘文。
③取好材。有兩點要求:一是材料要新,要選擇比較新穎的素材來寫,與時俱進,盡量摒棄那些陳舊的素材,不要一寫到媽媽,自己就生病,被送醫院。二是角度要巧。即使是常見的素材,我們也要別出心裁發揮想象和聯想,向深層次挖掘,展現對生活的獨特感悟,使自己的作文有深度。
④用好語。要做到流暢、準確、形象、生動,富有神韻。
(2)半命題作文,要注意兩點:
①緊扣題眼,重視隱含信息。而半命題作文,題面不長,其間還有空白,呈殘缺式,審題時,我們要認真研究文題中的引言和要求,緊扣題眼,吃透已經出示的半命題詞語的含義,充分吸取題中的隱含信息,在提示語中尋找適合的立意角度。
②立足擅長,添加別致內容。半命題作文,補題是關鍵。補題的過程意味著對寫作內容、寫作角度的選擇。補題時,要根據自己的人生體驗和生活積累,補出自己熟悉的、感悟最深的、最容易寫出新意的題目,這樣,才能揚已所長,掌握主動。
第四篇:中考作文技巧分析
中考作文系列指導分析之一
(開頭)
中考語文改革已明顯傾向于讀寫考查,作文得分高是語文得優分的關鍵。因此如何輔導學生臨場作文技巧,是值得畢業班語文教師研究的問題。
一、命題要新穎
題目是文章的眼睛,富有新意的標題是寫好作文的開端。平時訓練時,教師要讓學生重視文題對作文的重要性。要鼓勵學生盡最大可能創造出新穎的作文題目,以爭取作文得高分的第一良好印象。如,面對題目《_________的一幕》,有的學生填寫“尷尬”,就能給人以新鮮的感覺。若是材料、話題類作文,要在認真讀懂材料的前提下,擬出一個好題目,如,話題作文:情節感人的文學作品使人如醉如癡;優美動聽的校園歌曲使人心曠神怡;精彩激烈的體育比賽使人激動不已;充滿真情的電影電視使人回腸蕩氣??請從下題中任選一題作文,補全題目,寫一篇不少于600字的文章。(1)《讀_______我真______》(2)《聽________我真_______》(3)《看_______我真_______》。學生在認真分析話題提示時,明白了“讀”、“聽”、“看”的內涵,于是陜西一考生擬寫《讀<唐詩宋詞選>我真癡迷》,便使作文擁有了一個成功的作文題,也使這篇作文在閱卷者眼中留下第一個“滿分”印象。
二、開頭要引人
好開頭有“回眸一笑百媚生”的動人效果。考場作文,應慎寫開頭,認真對待第一句,第一段的寫作,最好先在稿紙上寫出開頭的段落,然后再自我感受幾遍,若能讓自己激動起來,那么也定能感動別人。如考生寫《人生最需要掌聲》的開頭:“人生最需要掌聲。許多人時常感嘆:知音難求。何為知音,知音難道不就是人生中的鼓掌者嗎?”這是一篇滿分作文的開頭,這是個能激動自己的開頭,如同剛打開水閘門一樣,使自己的寫作如洪水般一瀉千里。“良好的開端是成功的一半。”寫好了開頭,也便留給了批閱者“成功的一半”的印象。
三、內容要情真
構思內容,要做到以真情感動人。切勿內容假、大、空,切勿寫自己并不了解的內容,不能感動自己當然便不會感動別人,因此在選擇寫作內容時,要選擇自己受感動的內容,這感動自己的內容往往是自己親身經歷,親眼目睹的,而且往往是一些瑣屑的小事件,小細節;或者是自己曾閱讀過的有很深印象的書刊登載,寫作時可以將舊內容換新角度使用。寫自己的真感,如《尷尬的一幕》。考生寫一細節:走廊上,與老師擦肩而過,自己試著努力想對老師說聲“老師好”,可終于沒有說出來,面對老師的微笑,自己低頭而匆匆逃過,感到尷尬至極。這是一個真切動人的小細節,是作者的實情流露,更是文章內容的精華細節。真情的細節內容構成文章的血肉軀體,是好作文的重要組成部分,是高分作文的關鍵,因為好細節才能打動批閱者心。
四、結構要創新
精心布局,創新結構框架,在閱卷者面前樹立完美的整體形象,并產生一目了然的效果。如:反復排比式、日記體式、劇本形式、小標題式、鏡頭組合式、問答式、應用文體式等,都是有創新意義的結構體,且這種新框架極利于考場作文獲取優分印象。如考生寫《吳誠信的就癥報告》,結構上以“病情”“病因”“處方”的體式布局謀篇,給閱卷者以新穎的結構感,因此這篇作文在考場中獲得了滿分。
五、書寫要工整
工整、流利的書寫給人的印象是:如同步入衛生清潔的場地。讀一篇書寫工整的作文,如見到漂亮的羅敷,使“耕者忘其耕,鋤者忘其鋤”。工整的書寫是考場作文給評卷者的良好直觀印象。并且,工整的書寫也是一種禮貌的表現,書寫工整,如同出門做客時整潔的穿著,是一種自重、尊人的表現。
考場作文,時間十分有限,因此,教師一定要重視作文輔導,讓學生掌握戰略戰術,從而最大限度地贏取考場優分。
第五篇:2016年中考作文分析
2016年河南省中招語文試卷作文題目解析
1、題目:我的青春里有——
2、材料:
畫家費盡心力創作了一幅畫,在即將完成時,不小心將一桶滴油墨滴在畫上,他沮喪極了,想要放棄這幅畫,冷靜下來后,他反復變轉角度看那個墨跡,隨后,在墨跡上涂了幾筆,墨跡變成了一只飛鳥,與整幅畫完美融合。
點評題目一:我的青春里有——
這個作文題是很常規的記敘文,還是寫人寫事的文章,也是學生常寫的話題,可以補充填上自己認為較容易寫的內容。如補上“自信”、“堅強”等詞語,有的考生往往填上一些消極、不健康的內容,給半命題作文帶來了一些負面作用,自然也降低了作文的品位。如考生在橫線上填了“打麻將”、“抽煙”、“喝酒”等詞語,讓人瞠目結舌,甚為困惑。因此,寫作時不能憑一時的感情沖動,或是標新立異,填寫上一些消極、不健康的內容,而應填寫積極向上,反映青少年時代風貌的健康內容。
也不要把題目擬得過大,難以寫出情真意切的佳作來。如果把題目補為《我的青春里有大自然》、《我的青春里有名著》,對于這樣大的題目,文章容易寫得空泛、籠統,難以寫出真情實感。所以,在補題的時候盡量把題目具體化,貼近自己的生活實際。
點評題目二:材料作文
首先需要審題。從立意上看,我們認為以下幾種立意屬于準確地理解材料,應判切合題意,內容項在一檔打分。
(一)人要從不利走向有利,就要依靠自己永不放棄的精神。
(二)人要從失誤的陰影中走出來,就需要聰明過人的智慧、靈活變通地思維、高超絕妙的技藝。
(三)成功往往有其偶然性,但更有其必然性。
其中
(一)(二)兩點可同時采用,也可從任意一個或幾個角度立意。
以下幾種立意屬于較準確地理解材料,應判符合題意,內容項在二檔打分。
(一)做人不能被失誤打倒。
(二)要戰勝困難才能成功。
(三)挫折不可怕,戰勝挫折才能成功。
這幾類立意只是抓住了材料的表面現象,而沒有深入理解裁縫成功的根本原因,因此在內容只評為二類。
以下立意屬于對材料的理解存在一點偏差,應判基本符合題意,內容項在三檔打分。
(一)創新塑造成功。
(二)天生我材必有用。
其次是確定題材。個人認為這則材料作文寫成議論文好寫些。
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