第一篇：第六界全國創新英語作文大賽優勝作文選登

2012屆全國創新英語作文大賽第六屆優勝作文選登 題目：

Directions: Some people maintain that universities are the best place for young people to receive higher education;other people believe that young people can be equally educated by taking correspondence courses or going to evening classes and open universities in their spare time.Write an article of about 300 words in which you compare and contrast the

advantages and disadvantages of formal university education and informal higher education.Which do you think is more effective and desirable? Support your argument with appropriate examples or illustrations.命題思路：

本試題要求學生對比高等教育的兩種主要形式：正規的大學課堂教育與函授、夜大學、電視大學等業余的非正規高等教育。學生必須在對比權衡兩種不同模式的利弊后，闡述自己的觀點，并有適當的例證。

第二篇：第七屆全國創新英語作文大賽優勝作文選登

第七屆全國創新英語作文大賽優勝作文選登

Directions:

With the development of computers, more and more people are working with computers.But, we know that computers are harmful as well as useful and helpful.Here, you are asked to write an essay on the topic “The Advantages and Disadvantages of Computers”.You can give some examples and facts to support your opinion.Your essay should be written in English with no less than 300 words within 60 minutes.The Advantages and Disadvantages of Computers

李彥妮

遼寧市鞍山市第一中學10屆14班

Nowadays, the idea of progress loorns so large in the modern world, and the progress of a particular kind is actually taking place around us.In this circumstances, computers which have a great help come out with the wisdom and hard-working of human beings.It do have given human a tremendous help, it, however, has brought to us its harmness at the some time.The computers can make a great help for us in this high speed society.In the light of this statement, it is computers that can store documents for us which is essential for us, it is computers that can shorten the time in seeking useful information instead of looking for knowledge from a large sums of books and it is computers that can make it possible to comunicate with different people who are far away from you.In a word, we can't live nomally without computers in such a high-tech society.On the contary, having helped us a lot, computers are harmful to people at the same time, especially the adolescents.First of all, sitting in front of the computer may do harm to our eyes.On the other hand, computers not only bring us useful information but also entertainments.Being weak in controlling themselves, those poor adolescents are more easier to get crazy about the fantasy world.Seeing a vivid picture which is about a son who gets stuck in computers and phones to his parents downstairs to bring dinner for him.I realized deeply that the computers really have their disadvantages.According to the statements above, it can not be superficial to simply say that computers are good or bad for us as every coin has both sides.Personally, I still consider that a computer can bring us convinience and high speed which is extolled to all the people even though it is a two-edged weapon.We can learn well punctuated by those purchasable wells of wisdomtechnology.建議該生平時多閱讀英語議論文章，觀察并模仿規范議論文的文章結構設計，盡量使自己以后的文章做到結構清晰明了。

專家點評：

本文詞匯運用較為準確，高級；句型句式較為豐富；議論語言較有力度。但是，文章段落結構出現了較大的問題：引言段，文章主體以及為支持“計算機優勢觀點”所舉的例子都以平行結構出現在了不同段落中，而文章關于“計算機劣勢觀點”所舉的例子卻和其相應的觀點擠在一個段落中。所以容易給人雜亂無章的感覺。

第三篇：第七屆全國創新英語作文大賽優勝作文選登（最終版）

第七屆全國創新英語作文大賽優勝作文選登

復賽試題： Directions: With the development of computers, more and more people are working with computers.But, we know that computers are harmful as well as useful and helpful.Here, you are asked to write an essay on the topic “The Advantages and Disadvantages of Computers”.You can give some examples and facts to support your opinion.Your essay should be written in English with no less than 300 words within 60 minutes.The Advantages and Disadvantages of Computers 李彥妮

遼寧市鞍山市第一中學10屆14班

Nowadays, the idea of progress loorns so large in the modern world, and the progress of a particular kind is actually taking place around us.In this circumstances, computers which have a great help come out with the wisdom and hard-working of human beings.It do have given human a tremendous help, it, however, has brought to us its harmness at the some time.The computers can make a great help for us in this high speed society.In the light of this statement, it is computers that can store documents for us which is essential for us, it is computers that can shorten the time in seeking useful information instead of looking for knowledge from a large sums of books and it is computers that can make it possible to comunicate with different people who are far away from you.In a word, we can't live nomally without computers in such a high-tech society.On the contary, having helped us a lot, computers are harmful to people at the same time, especially the adolescents.First of all, sitting in front of the computer may do harm to our eyes.On the other hand, computers not only bring us useful information but also entertainments.Being weak in controlling themselves, those poor adolescents are more easier to get crazy about the fantasy world.Seeing a vivid picture which is about a son who gets stuck in computers and phones to his parents downstairs to bring dinner for him.I realized deeply that the computers really have their disadvantages.According to the statements above, it can not be superficial to simply say that computers are good or bad for us as every coin has both sides.Personally, I still consider that a computer can bring us convinience and high speed which is extolled to all the people even though it is a two-edged weapon.We can learn well punctuated by those purchasable wells of wisdomsmile deeply from one's heart, in the whole world.It is a great chance for all members getting closer to each other in communities by taking part in volunteer work.Their team spirits, their co-operation will be great improued.So, why not? The most importantly, for the whole world, for the entire human race, volunteer work will make earth a better place to live in, it is through volunteer work that we know there are so many people are willing to help others although they can't get money from it.It is through volunteer work that we know we are all brothers and sisters, that we are all families.My dear grandfather, canre on!Join us and help introduce owr great Chinese culture to the world.21 centuring is on open cewtury.You can trust yourself and please trust us, too!We'll help you and we need you help!Let's make the world a better place by being a volunteer!It's a small step for us but it is a leurge one for the whole world!Love you.Your granddaught.專家建議：

句子之間的銜接做的還不是很到位，建議多練練關聯詞的用法。詞匯不夠豐富，句型變化不多，建議多看些范文，多練一些經典句型。

專家點評：

文章立意很好，整體結構清晰，語言大體流暢，還能夠引經據典，顯示出有一定的 文化底蘊。

第四篇：2013年全國英語創新大賽作文

外語屋教育

2013年全國英語創新大賽模板作文

How to Eliminate Fake Diplomas

As is known to us all, jobs or something else.What’s worse, someone even takes faking diplomas as their jobs.It is generally accepted that faking diplomas does no good to not only the universities or companies but also the owners.The universities or companies may have some low-skilled students or workers, which will make the institutions suffer a lot.For the owners, faking diplomas may cause a bad thought in their mind, because they hold the opinion that faking diplomas can solve all the problems.If this trend came into being, the whole society would be in such a mess.Therefore, how to solve the problem is worth paying more attention to.What’s worse, our country may fall behind compared with other countries, if the trend continues.The following ways can be adopted to eliminate fake diplomas.Firstly, the universities and companies can have a search to see whether the diplomas are real or not online.Secondly, they can give exams to check whether they have skills.Thirdly, our government should take measures.For example, the government can set an online data base store to help universities or company check online conveniently.Last but not least, we, the civil, should set up a proper attitude to faking diplomas, and refuse to do that.And if we see someone is faking diplomas, we should give an alarm to the police in order to make a harmonious society.It's true that we need high-skilled workers, but what we need more is honesty.Only if we treat others in honesty can we set up a world in harmony.However, eliminating fake diplomas is still on the way.We need to spare no effort to do that.Only when we stop this trend can we live in a fair society.Never Give Up

As an old proverb goes, never give up.At anytime, whether giants in any field or common people, the old saying can refer to them.No doubt, only with the determination of “Never giver up” can we achieve the final success.Many remarkable reasons contribute to this argument.First of all, success usually can’t be achieved until after a lot of failures.It is not unusual for us to fail in our first attempt at something new, so we should not feel discouraged by our failures but should try again, which is the main basic spirit of “never give up”.What’s more, a lot of scientific achievements are created under the spirit.For example, if Edison had given up his research after a few failures, we might not have the electric light today.If WangXizhi once had given up his ambition to write excellently, I’m afraid we might not have the brilliant handwriting.Besides, we can develop confidence from our mistakes and failures.In addition, it also helps us to improve our skills.All mentioned above tell us that it is necessary for us to do the right things without giving up.If we give up, we will not achieve anything.Besides, if we give up, it may make us lose heart.And if we always give up when confronted with difficulties, we will not be able to develop new skills and see miracles come out

All in all, “never give up” is a basic requirement for us.Not only can we achieve success but also make us confident.We should never give up when working towards our goals.Therefore, there is no denying that we should have the determination of “Never give up”, whatever we do.Only with this belief in mind can we really achieve something.The Difference in Income Sources between American and Chinese Student

As is described in the chart, we can clearly learn that Chinese students depend on parents much more than American students.It is reported that American students get a large amount of income from their part-time jobs rather than from parents which suggests that American students are much more independent.愛心用心專心 1

外語屋教育

There are many reasons accounting for that case.First of all, as we all know, Chinese students are ordered to keep on studying for a long time in order to pass exams while American students have much more free time when they can earn money.Secondly American students are taught to be independent when they are young.On the other hand, Chinese students’ priority is to study well since they set foot into schools.Thirdly, American government allows children to do part-time jobs, while Chinese government doesn't.Last but not least, the college scholarships in China are not enough to meet most of Chinese students' needs.As a result, it's quite evident that why there exists such a big difference in income sources.As we all know, the way American students use to earn money will make

them much more independent, while we Chinese students will never catch up with up with them.So it’s high time that we were supposed to take measures.In my opinion, the Chinese should learn from Americans.The students should find more chances for part-time jobs in spite of parents' help, because they can not only lighten the heavy load of high tuitions fees on their family, but also gain necessary social skills and experience in communication or others.By means of doing part-time jobs, they can also have an objective view on this country, and even develop their creative ability.Therefore, Chinese students' income source should be diversified.Telephone or letter

Quite a few people take it for granted that telephone has taken the place of letters.Even some hold the opinion that we don't need letters anymore.On the other hand, some prefer to write rather than make a phone call.In my view, I'm in favor of the former.Of course, writing can organize one's thoughts more logically.By writing they express themselves more easily.But writing a letter takes a lot of time and sometimes it makes one so eager to receive his letter that he may get worried.Besides, it will cost us a lot of money if we want to write to a friend far from us.As we all know, as a convenient way to making a phone call gets more and more popular.The following reasons can account for my argument.First, the telephone provides us a quick way to get connected tothe person who we want to contact.A good example is that it takes us only a few minutes to call an ambulance by phone.Second, by making a call, we can listen to the speaker's voice on the line as if we are talking face to face, which, I believe, can strengthen the relationship between each other.Third, it suits the world's fast current on economy and life style.If we wrote instead of making a phone call, we would lose chances or right time to earn money or to develop our companies.Last but not least, with the development of Internet, the Internet telephone is more popular, which costs a little.All in all, I still hold the opinion that writing must be set aside(建議用make way)for making a phone call, because the former doesn't suit our fast steps at all.What we need is a much cheaper and fast way for daily life.（302）

愛心用心專心 2

第五篇：全國創新英語大賽優秀作文

題目：

Directions:

Read the following paragraph and write a composition as stated at about 300 words in 60 minutes.Your composition will be graded according to clarity, accuracy and meaningfulness.In accordance with CRI news, the spirit of Chinese volunteers, from responding to the May 12 earthquake to the 2008 Beijing Olympic Games, not only touched the Chinese people, but also generated worldwide attention.Official statistics show that china has accumulated about 8 billion hours of volunteer work from 380 million volunteers since 1993 and is going to have more and more volunteers, especially the youth.How do you understand volunteer work? In what way(s)is it important to promote the well-being of individuals, families, communities and the world at large? Your writing ought to contain three parts, your viewpoint, the supporting ideas, and the conclusion.Come and join us in volunteer work right now!

On Volunteer

黃昕彤 遼寧省鞍山市鞍山一中108班

The definition of the word volunteer in Lougnan（Longman）Dictionary is someone who helps others sponstaneously（spontaneously）and willingly.That's true!Life is a style of enjoying yourself, not only by entertaing and enriding yourself, but also by the process of helping others.Undoubtfully, those volunteers reveal their great love and passion for their country.Love is the eternal theme of the world, Without hove(love), it's like birds without wings, failing to show its talents of flying, It's like spring without flowers, burying is charming fragrants in the deep soil.Their volunty work unites China, shouing the world how united Chinese people are shocking the world of its cooperation.People around the country are making their efforts to helping others, which leaves the world an impression that China is a veal country, and all the people here are like brothers and sisters, who cares a lot for others.You can never imagine how touched I was when I watched the TV program called “Moving China”.13 peasants from tangshang volunteered to help those victims of Sichuang on hearing the tremendous earthquake happened there, leaving all their farm work done in the field they sacrifiled anything and helped others at any cost, for they knew the glant pains the earthquake brings to people.They can never forget how much pains they havendertaken in the earthquake and how much help they have received from the world.They compared their own feelings to the victims and passed the splrit on.In this sense, people will pass the spirit from generation to queneration, from China to all over the world.Then, how sweet will the World be!

I have a dream that one day, I will be a member of the volunteer team.I have a dream that oneday, I'll make contributions to China however slightest it may be.I have a dream that one day I'll be a founder of a world Charity, helping people all over the world.I'm firmly convinced that it will not only be a drean for me, but also a drean for people all over China, all over the world, and for the great Global Village.專家建議：

整篇文章條理清晰，結構完整，總體感覺很好。但有個別語法錯誤，固定搭配有些用得不夠準確，建議多用課本學過的固定搭配或是詞組造句。

專家點評：

文章語言流暢，運用了修辭手法，展現出一定的語言功底。此外，論據生動有力，讓人信服。如果句子之間的多用些關聯詞就更好了。

陳茜 江蘇省哈爾濱市第三中學高三18班

Dear grandfather:

How are you?

I am writing to invite you to join us, in the next year, to be a voluntear in the great event, which is to hold in Shanghai.We, a generation born in the 90s in our city, have made a team to do the volunteer work.And you are welcomed by all our team members awing to your great amount of knowledge about Chinese traditions and culture.Please don't tell me you are too old to do this job.I believe you are sure to accept my invitation after reading my following explannation of the importance of the volunteer work.Nowadays, volunteer work, which has raised public interest and concern, is becomming more and more popular throughout the world.As is known to all, volunteer work is not only meaningful but also necessary.One my personal wete, what's more, it's interesting and pleasant!It help us develop oursel.Firstly, for individuals, especially those young, to do volunteer work is an awailuabe wany to goin social experience.By doing volunteer work, they can meet vorrious people and they may run across all kinds of troubles.They however, can become mature and determined by solving these problems.You know, no pains, no gains.Also, individuals will realize that they do make a difference in someone else's life, even the whole event, the world!Their confidence can be rovised and confidence is what it takes to do any job well.For families, if you're the side that received the help of the volunteers, of couse your issue will be more easily dealt with.If you're the side who give others your hand, you will realize there exists no better way to educate your children that “a virtwre deserues amother” because you'll get the best presentsmall at first, contained within its banks, flood passionally then merged into the sea, for the sense of moral considerations.And now, I quite support to be a volunteer.We can never forget these moving scenes: A group of adolecents from Beijing dashed to the City of Wenchuan who gave up their comfortable living situations and picked up the heavy burden to save people buried into the ground, while a middle aged white collar who threw away his computer and salary came here to fetch wictims' lives from the death.It is volunteers who rushed to this place which has suffered from the catastrophe that gave a great help to those victims in need.A volunteer can support a piece of sky, and this one reason I am eager to join them.Secondly, only a volunteer who is in active part in Beijing Olympic Games will he give a great help to those losers.It is volunteers who gave us a warm welcome to Beijing that put the glorious sports meeting from in chaos to in order.A person, as we know, who hasn’t join into the group of volunteer is one of the unfortunate victims of this society which is occupied with love.All of us are in high pressure in this adverse circumstance.Our mind catches hold of something and will not let it go, if we choose the way to argue with the mind, the stronger the will, the more fuitile the task, so we, should choose a way to help others, to see the smile from others.Then the pressure get out suiftly.I always go into rapture at a mere mention of being a volunteer and regard it as a person who is eager to help others or a group not in the same class with the suburban social-climbers.It seems a cliché but a saying which is an infallibility that a splendid case can not leave a volunteer just as a fish can not live without water.專家點評：作者盡量用到了一些高級詞語和句型，表明作者有一定的英語功底，但是小的錯誤頻發，如單詞拼寫，語法問題，句子邏輯，這在某一方面也表明作者的基本功有待提高，繼續努力。

專家建議：用詞準確是寫作的基礎。對于學習英語的中國學生來說，背單詞擴大詞匯量是有必要的，但遺憾的是，學生們背的大都是單詞的“外殼”，記的大都是單詞的表意或字典提供的大致意思，而基本上忽視了詞在語境中的作用和詞的“精神”。這種只記單詞表意的學習方法對提高語言的運用能力，特別是寫作能力是極其不利的。

Let us shine

徐葉子 江蘇省張家港市張家港外國語學校高二4班

Volunteers are just like diamonds in the sun, and the diamonds are forever, especially the youth.Volunteer work is just like a miracle.From the May 12th earthquake to the 2008 Beijing Olympic Games, volunteer work made unbelievable contributions.60 years ago our country was set up, today we will celebrate its 60th birthday.In this process, volunteer work did a lot of help and now our country is standing in the world just like a giant.In the past years, volunteers have helped a large number of people, the old, the young, the poor and the homeless.All the volunteers know that the road ahead will be long and cragged, but no matter what obstacles stand in their way they will never stop.Because they have a creed and they believe everything is possible.Oh the creed of volunteer work, you make volunteers keep on going without hesitation.Oh the creed of volunteer work, you make volunteers hand in hand and be with together forever.Oh the creed of volunteer work, you make volunteers go to the edge of the world and let them know the true meaning of life.Do you know what the creed is? Yes, it is love.With love, volunteer work makes people open their mind and let them find the sky is theirs.With love, volunteer work makes people look into their hearts and let the sunshine in.With love, volunteer work makes people believe that smilers will never lose and frowners will never win.I know something has changed because of volunteer work.I know it for real because it feels so right and the world looks so much brighter.Love is important to volunteer work and volunteer work is important to the whole world.The infinite sky is motionless and the blue ocean is boisterous.This moment is perfect.Let us become volunteers and try our best in volunteer work.It can be the start of something new and it's our turn to learn some or win some.So, let's make a wish and get ready to shine like diamonds.專家建議：

建議該考生在語言流暢的基礎之上，注意兩方面問題。第一，用詞更具體些，避免使用語義較為空泛的表達，如learn some or win some。第二，文章華美有余，但邏輯層次不足。需加強句子與句子之間以及段落與段落間的邏輯性。

專家點評：

該作文使用了很多修辭方式，從這一點上看，作者在學習英語的過程中一定是位有心人，注重邊閱讀邊積累背誦。同時能看出，作者一定是一位喜愛英文歌曲的人，文中很多表達都來自于音樂歌詞。但在遣詞造句時，需要區分口頭表達和較書面表達，在這點上，文章還有提高的空間。