第一篇：廣東省高考英語 作文專題三 夾敘夾議型 讀寫任務

專題三

夾敘夾議型 讀寫任務

夾敘夾議就是一方面敘述某一事情，一方面又對此事加以分析與評論。這種表達方式中的敘與議是一個有機的整體，“敘”是“議”的基礎，即議論不能脫離記敘，必須在記敘的基礎上展開；“議”是“敘”的滲透，即議論在記敘的基礎上發表，且要有一定的深度與廣度。

寫夾敘夾議類書面表達時，思維要有靈活性，要隨著記敘與議論的轉換，及時調整思維方式。

例題：閱讀下面短文，然后按照要求寫一篇150詞左右的英語短文。

As I got into a taxi one afternoon, the driver was very angry about something that had happened to him earlier that day.Here’s how he told the story：

“One of my fares(旅客)left a wallet in my cab this morning.Nearly three hundred dollars in it.I spent more than an hour trying to trace the guy.Finally I found him at his hotel.He took the wallet without a word and glared at me as though I’d meant to steal it.” “He didn’t give you a reward？” I asked.“Not a cent.But it wasn’t the money I wanted，” he fumbled, then exploded,“If the guy had only said something…” Why was the driver so upset? All he wanted was something simple, but even more valuable than money: to be thanked for his efforts.In short, what he wanted, what he needed but did not get, was a little bit of gratitude.[寫作內容]

1．概括故事的內容要點，以此引入話題，該部分的詞數大約30。

2．以約120個詞就“感激”這個主題發表你的看法，至少包含以下內容要點：

(1)什么是感激(gratitude)?

(2)感激的表現方式。

(3)表達感激最重要在于真誠(sincere)。

(4)故事的啟示和你的結論。

[寫作要求]

1．你可以使用實例或其他論述方法支持你的論點，也可以參照閱讀材料的內容，但不要抄襲閱讀材料中的句子。

2.作文中不能出現真實姓名和學校名稱。[評分標準]

概括準確，語言規范，內容合適，篇章連貫。

練習(一)閱讀下面的短文，然后按照要求寫一篇150詞左右的英語短文。

During summer holidays, two classmates, Tom and Peter, were traveling in the desert.As they were walking, they had an argument, and Tom was so angry that he slapped Peter hard across the face.Peter felt hurt, but without saying anything, he wrote down in the sand these words: “Today my best friend Tom slapped me in the face.”

It was very hot, but they kept on walking and walking until they found an oasis(綠洲), where they decided to take a bath.Suddenly Peter got stuck in the mire(泥潭)and started drowning.Seeing that, Tom rushed over and saved him without any hesitation.After Peter got recovered from the drowning, he wrote with a knife on a stone: “Today my best friend Tom saved my life.”

Feeling curious, Tom, who had slapped and saved his best friend, asked Peter, “After I beat you, you wrote something in the sand but just now you put down what I had done on a stone.Why？”

Peter replied, “When someone hurts us, we should take it down in the sand where winds of forgiveness can erase it away.But when someone does something good for us, we must carve it in the stone where no wind can ever erase it.” Hearing that, Tom was deeply moved and understood what Peter had said and what he had done.[寫作內容]

請你以“What I Have Learnt From Tom’s Understanding”為題，談談你讀了這個故事以后的感受。內容要點包括：

1．以約30個詞概括上述故事的要點。

2．以約120個詞就Peter“被打”和“被救”后的舉動發表你的看法，內容包括：

(1)Tom 為什么感動了？他到底明白了什么？

(2)你從這個故事中學到了什么？簡要說明其理由。

練習(二)閱讀下面的短文，然后按照要求寫一篇150詞左右的英語短文。

A long time ago, there was a huge apple tree.A little boy loved to come and lay around it every day.They loved to play together.As time went by, the boy had grown up and no longer played around it.One day, he came back and the tree exci-tedly invited him to play.But the boy said he needed money to buy toys.“Sorry, but I have no money, but you can pick all my apples and sell them，” said the tree.The boy did as told and left happily but never came back.The tree was sad.Many years passed, the boy returned and told him he had to make money to build a house for his family.The tree happily offered his branches for his house.With the branches, the boy left satisfied.The tree was again lonely and sad.Then one hot summer day, the tree was delighted to see the boy back again.“Come and play with me！” The tree said.“I am sad and getting old.I want to go sailing to relax myself.Can you give me a boat？” “Use my trunk to build your boat.” The boy cut the tree trunk and went sailing but never showed up for a long time.The tree was happy, but it was not true.Finally, the boy returned after he left for so many years.“Sorry, my boy.But I don’t have anything for you anymore.No more apples for you.” The tree said with tears.The boy replied that he was too old and needed nothing.“Good!Old tree root is the best place to lean on and rest.Come, sit down with me and rest.” The boy sat down and the tree was glad and smiled with tears… [寫作內容]

1．以約30個詞概括上述寓言故事的要點。

2．以約120個詞，寫出以下內容：

(1)故事的寓意及讀后感。

(2)假如你是故事中的那個男孩，你會怎樣做？ [寫作要求]

1．可以使用實例來支持你的論點，也可以參照閱讀材料的內容論述，但不得直接引用原文中的句子。

2．作文中不能出現真實姓名和學校名稱。[評分標準]

概括準確，語言規范，內容合適，篇章連貫。

例題【參考范文】

We Cannot Do Without Gratitude

The other day I read a story which is about a taxi driver who got mad and disappointed，for he received nothing for his efforts to return the lost wallet to its owner，not even a simple word.The story sets me thinking about gratitude.Gratitude is the feeling of being grateful，the art of receiving gracefully，and the act of showing appreciation for every act of kindness，big or small，that others do for us.Gratitude can take many forms.It can be expressed by a large，dramatic gesture or it can be shown in a small way，like finding a very original and personal way to say thanks for a friend’s gift.Whatever we do to show our gratitude，we should do it in a sincere manner，for it is the feelings in our hearts that matter the most.The story reminds us how important it is to express our gratitude to the ones who have offered us help.We can never be too grateful.The smiles and the thanks we give help us to build a better world，one that we can all live in and enjoy.練習

(一)【參考范文】

What I Have Learnt From Tom’s Understanding

While traveling in the desert, Tom slapped Peter’s face, and Peter wrote it down in the sand.But when he was saved, Peter carved that down on a stone, which moved Tom deeply.In this story, Tom was touched by Peter’s actions because he was ready to forgive others by forgetting unhappy things and he would remember and value it forever in his memory when his life was saved.I think what Tom understood was how to get along well with friends and how to deal with others’ kindness and rudeness.As for me, not everyone has the same good virtues and behaviors as Peter if such things happen to us.In my eyes, Peter is really our role model.“Attitude is everything！” So let’s try to be kind to people who have done something unpleasant to us, and grateful to those who have done us favors.Anyway, true friendship never comes easily.練習(二)【參考范文】

The fable presents a sentimental story to us in which an apple tree satisfied a boy’s wishes unconditionally by sacrificing everything for him.All it desired is the boy’s company.The tree in the fable is affectionate and unselfish.The moral of it is that parental love is so infinite that children should be grateful for that.I was deeply moved by the fable and felt an impulse to praise all the parents.It made me realize how great my parents are and I should be grateful for what they have done.If I were the boy, I would keep contact with the tree and be considerate.First, from the bottom of my heart, I know the tree is more than a tree;it is my dearest love.Young or old, I would keep in touch with it using various ways.If I have to travel away, I would write to it, phone him or send e-mails to it informing it of my life.Second, in order not to let my dearest feel so lonely, I would plant some trees and flowers around it.These plants will brave the hard winters with it.In addition, I would invite some other children to play with it.Their company will surely make the life more colorful.Therefore, if I were the boy, I would hold the tree dearly.

第二篇：高考優秀作文.doc夾敘夾議

高考優秀作文——善舉≠拯救

本報今日刊登10篇高考優秀作文以饗讀者——夾敘夾議，見解力的不俗

有時你一個善意的舉動，或許并不能拯救一個或一群生命，相反，你會讓它們萬劫不復，就如那個游客一樣，本是出于善心去拯救一只小生命，卻不曾想，他因此而使幾乎所有的小龜成為老鷹的口中之食。

或許這個游客的心理是人類常有的，對于弱小的，沒有任何抵御能力的生命他們總會傾其所能去幫助它們，而他們卻不知道，這樣的溺愛或善心總會讓它們有那樣一種依賴的心理，到最后卻和人們的初衷背道而馳。

對于一個沿街乞討的乞丐，我們或許所能做的只是掏盡身上所有的口袋，給他一點施舍。而我們卻不知道，這樣做并不能解決根本的問題，他也不可能靠你那一點善意的“資助”而生活有任何的改變。或許我們該大聲告訴他們，一個人要生活，乞討沒有出路，他應該試著去努力工作，賺錢養活自己。誰都希望這世界上多一個自食其力的人，而不是逢人伸手的乞討者。不是嗎？

而這個游客的舉動也突然讓我覺得像現實社會中那些獨生子女的父母，他們總是把孩子當寶一樣，含在嘴里怕化掉，捧在手心怕碎掉。過分的溺愛讓孩子失去了獨立自主的能力，也使得孩子有了太強的依賴心理，其實他們應該給孩子一個適當的空間，讓孩子放手去成長的。曾看過一句話：既然老天給了我們青春，我們就要放手一搏。也相信，我們離開了父母的好心、溺愛，我們一定會有“摔倒了再爬起來”的能力，而不是爬在原地等父母把我們扶起來。

很多人遇到以上經歷時，一定也會像游客和我們的父母一樣，“護著小龜爬進大海”。而他們卻不知道，疼痛，是成長的第一步，沒有經歷過創傷和疼痛的人生是不可能完整的，因為經歷過，我們才不至于象小海龜一樣，在還未經歷生命是怎樣的過程便已經全部逝去。

所以，希望所有善良的人放開你們的手，讓我們去自己面對，自己去經歷吧!因為我們相信只有經歷過才會成長。

因為———疼痛，是生命的第一步。

評析：

文章在把握原材料的基礎上，提出了一個很好的命題，進而聯系到對獨生子女教育的問題。文章把游客的善舉———“護著小龜爬進大海”和當今社會一些家長對獨生子女的過分呵護、溺愛聯系起來，對比進行論述，見解不俗。

第三篇：最新2014高考英語二輪復習方案專題夾敘夾議型讀寫任務 Word版含答案

專題限時訓練(三十七)[夾敘夾議型讀寫任務]

(限時：每篇30分鐘)

A

閱讀下面的短文，然后按照要求寫一篇150詞左右的英語短文。

The “Clean Your Plate” campaign was started by nongovernmental organizations and activists, which urged people to save food by not wasting anything on the dining table.The campaign, launched on the microblog, was soon joined by millions of netizens across China to fight against food waste.The estimated annual waste of grain in China reaches 50 million tons, enough to feed about 200 million people for a year.People from across China support the campaign.The Central Government has promised to take measures to reduce food waste, take the lead in saving food and follow a simple working style.More and more Chinese are saying “no” to food waste.Staff members of a restaurant set off a campaign encouraging customers to stop food waste in Qingdao, Shandong Province, on Jan.24.“Did you empty the dishes today？” has become the most popular question in China.Showing an empty dish also turns a new fashion among Chinese netizens.In some restaurants, there are signs reminding the diners not to waste food.Some even offer awards to the customers who eat all their food, as part of the campaign to reduce waste.More and more restaurants kindly remind and encourage customers to take their leftovers away.[寫作內容]

1.以約30個詞概括上文的主要內容。

2.以約120個詞就“光盤行動”的話題談談你的想法，內容包括：

(1)“光盤行動”產生的背景；

(2)“光盤行動”的作用；

(3)你對“光盤行動”的看法和呼吁。

[寫作要求]

1.作文中可以使用親身經歷或虛構的故事，也可以參照閱讀材料的內容，但不得直接引用原文中的句子。

2.作文中不能出現真實姓名和學校名稱。

[評分標準]

概括準確，語言規范，內容合適，語篇連貫。

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B

閱讀下面的短文，然后按照要求寫一篇150詞左右的英語短文。

A little boy was playing in his sandbox.He had with him his box of toy cars and trucks and a red plastic shovel(鏟).In the process of creating roads in the soft sand, he discovered a large rock

in the middle of the sandbox.The boy dug around the rock, managing to get it out from the dirt.With a little bit of struggle, he pushed the rock across the sandbox by using his feet.When the boy got the rock to the edge of the sandbox, however, he found that he couldn't roll it up and move it to the wall.Determined, the little boy tried again, pushed, and shoveled, but every time he thought he had made some progress, the rock rolled and then fell back into the sandbox.The little boy struggled, pushed, and pulled, but failed.Finally he burst into tears.The boy's father watched him from his living room window all the time.At the moment the tears fell, a large shadow fell across the boy and the sandbox.It was the boy's father.Gently but firmly he said, “Son, why didn't you use all the strength available? ” Defeated, the boy sobbed, “But I did, Daddy, I did!I used all the strength that I had！” “No, son，” corrected the father kindly.“You didn't use all the strength you had.You didn't ask me.” With these words the father picked up the rock and removed it from the sandbox.[寫作內容]

1．以約30個詞概括短文要點。

2．以約120個詞就“人生需要幫助”的話題談談你的想法，內容包括：

(1)你讀完文章的感受；

(2)以你的親身經歷談談幫助的重要性；

(3)今后你是否也會幫助別人，為什么？

[寫作要求]

1．作文中可以使用親身經歷或虛構的故事，也可以參照閱讀材料的內容，但不得直接引用原文中的句子。

2．作文中不能出現真實姓名和學校名稱。

[評分標準]

概括準確，語言規范，內容合適，語篇連貫。

________________________________________________________________________ ________________________________________________________________________ ________________________________________________________________________

C

閱讀下面的短文，然后按要求寫一篇150詞左右的英語短文。

An elderly carpenter(木匠)was ready to retire.He told his employers of his plans to leave the house-building business to live a more leisurely life with his wife and children.His employer was sorry to see his good worker go and asked if he could build just one more house as a personal favour.The carpenter said yes, but it was obvious that his heart was already not in his work.He built it impatiently and used poor materials.It was unfortunate for a wonderful career to end like that.When the carpenter finished his work, his employer came to inspect the house.Then he handed the front door's key to the carpenter and said, “This is your house.It's my gift to you.”The carpenter was shocked!

What a shame!If he had known he was building his own house, he would have done it all so differently.So it is with us.We build our lives, a day at a time, often putting less than our best into the building.Then, with a shock, we realize we have to live in the house we have built.Therefore, build it wisely!

[寫作內容]

1.請你以約30詞概括上文的主要內容。

2.請你以約120詞以“Build your life wisely”為話題談談你的想法，內容包括：

(1)讀了短文之后，你覺得文中木匠的做法明智嗎？

(2)我們能以木匠建房的態度去對待我們的生活嗎？為什么？

(3)你覺得我們應該如何對待生活才是明智的？

[寫作要求]

你可以使用親身經歷或虛構的故事，也可以參照閱讀材料的內容，但不要直接引用閱讀材料中的句子。

[評分標準]

概括準確，語言規范，內容合適，語篇連貫。

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D

閱讀下面短文，然后按要求寫一篇150詞左右的英語短文。

A new rule from the Beijing Traffic Management Bureau, taking effect on Monday, will see jaywalkers fined 10 yuan(1.6 US dollars), according to a Beijing Times' report.“Chinese style of crossing the road” refers to large crowds of Chinese people crossing roads, no matter whether the traffic light is green or red.Indeed, the phenomenon of pedestrians running the red light is commonly seen in some cities.It is very dangerous that pedestrians scramble for roads with cars in crowded downtown areas.“Chinese style of crossing the road” reflects the deep-rooted belief that the law will not punish numerous offenders.In the fast-paced life, some people lack of safety awareness and cannot wait for the green light.Therefore, the group effect takes shape and some basic regulations have been thrown aside.However, we should analyse the reasons for running the red light comprehensively, instead of blindly blaming low quality of the public.The pedestrians' crossing roads with a disregard to traffic lights is related to the unscientific planning of urban transport, short green light and unbalanced relationship between pedestrians and cars.To some extent, pedestrians have no choice but to run the red light.[寫作內容]

1.以約30個詞概括短文的主要內容。

2.以約120個詞就“Chinese style road crossing” 這一話題談談你的想法，內容包括：

(1)你是怎么理解“中國式過馬路”的？

(2)你支持“罰款”嗎？ 為什么？

(3)你有什么建議？并說明現代城市需要新的交通法規。

[寫作要求]

你可以使用親身經歷或虛構的故事，也可以參照閱讀材料的內容，但不要直接引用閱讀材料中的句子。

[評分標準]

概括準確，語言規范，內容合適，語篇連貫。

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專題限時訓練(三十七)

A

One possible version：

When some people started the “Clean Your Plate” campaign in an effort to reduce food waste, millions of netizens joined it and more and more people are taking real action to prevent food waste.I'm quite delighted by this campaign.As far as I know, while people in developed countries don't have to worry about their meals, millions of people in some poor areas are suffering from hunger every day.Though most Chinese have enough food to eat, there are still some others who are struggling hard for a little food to fill their stomach.Unfortunately, I can always see people leave a large part of their food on their plate and throw it as waste.It is reported that every year the Chinese altogether waste 50 million tons of food, which is enough to feed 200 million people for a whole year.What an alarming waste it is!We should feel guilty to waste so much food.It is high time for us to stop such waste.There is every reason for us to clean our plates at our meals.If all people take action to cut down food waste, a large quantity of food can be saved and more people will be fed.The “Clean Your Plate” campaign is really good and useful.Let's join in it and eat up our meals instead of wasting any food.B

One possible version：

A little boy had some difficulty in removing a big rock from the sandbox.Though he tried hard, he still couldn't move it.Finally his father helped him and he managed.After reading this passage, I think highly of the father's words.He helped his son realize the importance of help.Similar things also occurred to me.I still remember last summer holiday when I travelled in Beijing on my own.Unfortunately, I lost my baggage, I was penniless and I couldn't go home.It was with the help of the local police that I was able to return home safely.What I experienced has taught me a lot.Help is very important for us, and we will benefit from others' help.There is no doubt that I will offer help as much as possible if I find someone who is in

trouble.Helping others is a good virtue, which will make problems solved more easily, make people feel the warmth of others, and make our lives better and better.C

One possible version：

Build your life wisely

A carpenter felt regretful when he knew the last house he had built impatiently was a gift for his retirement, which reminds us that we should build our life wisely.It is absolutely unwise of the carpenter to end up his career in this way.Treating his last job carelessly made him lose not only a good house but also his fame as an outstanding house builder.There is no doubt that we shouldn't treat our life as the carpenter did.As a saying goes, “How you treat life, and how life treats you！” If we are unwilling to face or deal with our life correctly, it will reward us nothing.Then how can we build our life wisely? It's fairly simple.The only answer is to be serious.Only when you treat all the matters happening in your life seriously can you learn and gain a lot, which is beneficial as well as wise.D

One possible version：

Chinese style road crossing

“Chinese style of crossing theroad” has become a funny term to criticize the traffic problem, which has aroused the public concern and debate whether the jaywalkers should be fined.In my view, I don't quite agree to fine the pedestrians as a serious punishment when crossing the red lights.As we all know, “Chinese style of crossing the road” reflects the deep contradiction between pedestrians and motor vehicles on distribution of right-of-way.Therefore, in order to solve the problem, we should strengthen education and guidance to enhance citizens' quality and awareness of obeying traffic rules, improve urban management, fully protect pedestrians' right-of-way, encourage drivers to learn the driving awareness in developed countries, install traffic lights in a scientific way and take necessary management measures.In this case, Chinese people may not be “uncivilized” in crossing roads and the traffic order in China will be greatly improved.In short, new rules and regulations should be fully discussed before they are put into practice.

第四篇：夾敘夾議教案

記敘文寫作之夾敘夾議教案

一、課

題：《記敘文寫作之夾敘夾議》

二、課

型：新授課（2課時）

三、教學目的：

1、明確記敘文以“記敘”為主體。

2、明確記敘文中的議論在記敘文中的地位和作用。

3、掌握記敘文中夾敘夾議的寫法。

四、重點、難點： 學會寫夾敘夾議的文章，以記敘為主，在記敘中運用恰當的議論。

五、突破方式： 講練結合，邊講邊練

六、教學方法：修改歸納

合作探究

閱讀賞析

七、教學過程：

（一）導入（創設意境）

“生活是海洋，凡有生活的地方就有快樂和寶藏。”（艾青）只有讓“生活的心”與“自我的心”互相碰撞，才能寫出生動的文章。

(教師講解)夾敘夾議是記敘文中常用的寫作手法。夾敘夾議記敘文是以議為綱，以敘為主，敘事是完整的，議論與之相輔相承。在記敘文中恰當地穿插一兩句議論，有時就能使一篇貌似平常的文字變得精辟，璨然生色，就像畫在壁上的龍，一經點上眼睛，就立刻電閃雷鳴，騰云而去。議論就是對客觀事物進行評論，以表明自己的觀點和態度。(板書課題)

（二）復習舊知

引導學生回憶記敘文相關知識

（三）新課講授：

1、介紹基本“夾敘夾議”的概念。（多媒體展示圖片）

講解：夾敘夾議是一面敘述某一件事，一面又對這件事進行分析、評論。這種寫法的好處是：筆法靈活多樣，生動活潑，還可以起到總起、提示、過度和總結等作用。一般來說敘是議的基礎，議是敘的深化，以敘為主，議在其中。記敘文的中議論，大多是在敘述描寫的基礎上引出作者的感想、認識，直接寫出對所寫的人物、事件的感受及主觀評價。作者猶如一個講解員，隨時隨地就所講述的人和事發表一點評論。

例如楊朔的《荔枝蜜》從看荔枝園、喝荔枝蜜，寫到參觀養蜂場：（學生齊讀，無條件由教師朗讀）

我想起一個問題，就問：“一只蜜蜂能活多久？”

老梁說：“蜂王可以活三年，工蜂最多活六個月。”

我不禁一顫：多可愛的小生靈啊！對人無所求，給人的卻是極好的東西。蜜蜂是在釀蜜，又是在釀造生活；不是為自己，而是為人類釀造最甜的生活。蜜蜂是渺小的，蜜蜂卻又是多么高深啊！

這段飽含詩情的議論，熱烈贊揚了蜜蜂無私奉獻的精神，給人以強烈的震撼。這樣的議論是作者認識飛躍的產物，它既能起到點睛的作用，又可以和寫人敘事互為映襯，交相輝映。

2、糾正文章的錯誤，進一步了解“夾敘夾議”

（1）同學們在日常作文中經常出現議論使用不恰當的現象。下面兩段話中的議論都有毛病，請先指出毛病，再做修改。段落一：雨，盡情地下著。走出考場，我看到雨中走來了我的母親，她很快匯入前來接考生的家長的人群。在考場樓前，在那一大群母親中，她的個子是那么小，可她也象每一個母親那樣，挺起矮小的身子，急切地在那些從考場里涌出的孩子中尋找著我。她打著一把雨傘，可那傘哪是為了遮擋她的身體！她把傘的一大半用來遮擋手中的東西，那時我的衣服、雨鞋，還有蛋糕、汽水、餅干。我到了她眼前，她眼淚汪汪的看著我，我一輩子也不會忘記母親看到我時的那種目光。那是難以用語言描繪的目光，那是母親眼里特有的光華。

毛病：———————————————————

修改：———————————————————

段落二：媽媽非常的疼我。一天，天生瘦弱的我病倒了。母親白天帶我到醫院排隊、掛號、看病、拿藥整整忙乎了一天，夜里又一直守候在我身邊，生怕發生什么意外。可那時我完全不知道媽媽一夜沒水，整整一夜，一直都在看護著我。第二天早晨，我慢慢的睜開雙眼，朦朧中，我看到了母親的臉，黯然無光，眼里布滿了血絲。顯然她已經疲憊不堪了。見我醒了，她用手輕輕的撫摸著我的前額，露出了欣慰的笑容。頓時我只覺得一股暖流涌上心田，啊！媽媽的經歷是多么的充沛，意志有十多么堅強啊！我真為有這樣一個精力充沛，意志堅強的媽媽而感到幸福。

毛病：—————————————————————— 修改：——————————————————————（2）學生讀材料后，交流討論得出答案。

（3）全班共同交流，學生回答自己是如何分析的。

明確：段落一毛病：結尾的議論空洞，不具體。

段落二毛病：結尾的議論抒情句和記敘、描寫的內容脫節，沒有準確地揭示記敘、描寫所要表現的內容。

3、小結：通過剛才我們的共同交流，同學們應認識到在記敘文寫作中運用議論需注意的問題有兩點：①、議論要具體、貼切。②、議論要和記敘、描寫和諧統一。

4、隨堂練習

請學生讀材料，按要求在下列文中的橫線上加入恰當的議論句。

在下面這段話結尾的橫線上，加入能揭示“我”感受和記敘內涵的議論句。

清晨，走在上學的路上，一片樹葉飄落在我的肩上。一葉知秋，我將它拾起，仔細地端詳。它那變化了的色澤，正在失去的柔軟，以及開始卷曲的形態，向我展示了一個生命最后階段的依戀與惆悵。----。（1）學生閱讀填寫。

（2）小組交流，推薦最好的學生發言。師生共同評議。

（3）參考答案：它似乎在告訴我，生命是多么美好，時光又是多么容易流逝，珍惜這大好青春吧！

5、寫作指導——歸納記敘文中議論的作用

記敘文中記敘是主體，是基礎。由于記敘還不能完全表達作者的意思，因此在敘述和描寫以外，往往還要使用議論；或是對事物的本質作理司性的分析；或是對事實的意義作必要的引伸，（由此及彼），以擴大讀者的認識；或是對問題進行辯證。（1）敘述中議論的特點

敘述中議論的特點有三：第一、議論是建立在記敘、描寫基礎上之上的，議論是由人物、事件的記敘生發開去的。第二，它可長可短，安排穿插比較自由。第三，作者常是由事生感，由感而議，因此，它又帶有抒情性，議論和抒情自然的結合起來。（2）敘述中夾敘夾議的形式： ①先議后敘（概括式）

這種形式往往出現在文章的篇首，主要作用是提示和點題，出現在一段文字開頭的議論，同樣具有概括全段的作用。這種議論句，我們通常稱之為中心句。②先敘后議（總結式）

這種形式往往出現在一篇文章或一段文字的結尾，帶有某種哲理的色彩或某種深沉的感慨，它的主要作用是總結全文、深化主題、畫龍點睛、啟迪思維等。③邊敘邊議（包容式）

邊敘邊議，即邊敘述事實，邊進行議論，發現自己對所敘事實的看法。

夾敘夾議中“議”是作者表達的一種認識，這種認識不僅要富含哲理，還要有飽滿的感情。正如古人所云：“立片言而居要，乃一篇至警策。”這是對“議”的最好的詮釋。需要指出的是，議論要看準當口，選擇時機，掌握火候，做到恰當到好處。（3）敘事中議論的作用

敘事中的議論大體有三點作用：一是議論可以使事實與道理相輝映。讀者不僅可以了解到事實，而且可以從中認識到事實具有的深刻意義；二是議論可以對敘述的事物進行適當的評價和分析，使主題表現得更加突出、鮮明，盡管是只言片語也能起到畫龍點睛的功效；三是議論可以直接表現作者的思想、情懷，把作者對客觀的見解和主張概括為抽象思維，給人以有益的啟迪。

（4）敘事中的議論的技法：

開宗明義，提挈全篇。即在文章開頭做精要議論，以提示全文中心并引起下文。穿針引線，承上起下。這種議論一般用于事情發展的轉換銜接處，也稱作夾敘夾議。如《誰是最可愛的人》一文就是通過議論把三個故事銜接得天衣無縫的。這種敘議相間的方式，由于運用了多層次的議論，便使得文章跌宕多姿，因而感染力也就更加強烈。

畫龍點睛，深化主題。凡是高明的作者總喜歡在記敘進入高潮后來一段精辟的議論，或突出性格，令人起敬；或點明事理，引人回味；或觸景生情，讓人慨嘆。

篇末點題，總結全文。敘事文結尾的議論，一般應做到總結全文，揭示主題，或意在言外，發人深思。

（5）敘述中議論應注意的問題

明確：在寫記敘文中運用抒情議論時要注意避免幾個問題： 一是“空”：議論和記敘脫節，各敲各的鑼，讓人不著邊際。

二是“淺”：議論沒有切中所記事物的深刻意義，浮光掠影，成為空洞的說教和時髦的口號。三是“濫”：議論多而且不當，即亂發議論。

八、參考資料：

九、作業布置：題目：這一次，我沒有放棄

要求：（1）寫成記敘文。（2）內用具體，中心明確，寫出自己堅持做某事的經歷。（3）結構合理，詳略得當，語言通順。（4）采用夾敘夾議的寫法。（5）字數不少于600字

十、課后反思：

第五篇：夾敘夾議作文指導

“夾敘夾議”作文寫作指導

一、教學目標

總的目標是通過系統復習，達到會寫夾敘夾議的文章。具體說來有三個方面的要求。

（一）整篇作文：

（1）準確全面地理解題意；（2）思想健康，中心明確，材料充實；（3）語言規范、準確、連貫、得體；（4）結構完整，條理清楚；（5）符合文體要求；（6）字體端正，卷面整潔。

（二）單項能力：

多寫一些“夾敘夾議”的語段，寫好“夾敘夾議”中的“敘”，寫好“夾敘夾議”中的“議”。

二、難點、重點分析

夾敘夾議是散文最常用的手法，也是記敘文與記敘性散文的最大區別之處。“敘”是抒情、議論的基礎，否則抒情議論將變得空洞；“議”是“敘”的升華、深化，使文章的內蘊豐富，所以說“枝繁葉茂”。但散文中的“敘”與“議”與記敘文與議論文不同，可引導學生閱讀中領悟。并在寫作訓練中練習，學會和提高夾敘夾議的能力。

夾敘夾議的作文就是以記敘為主，在記敘中運用恰當的議論。這類作文要寫好，一定要注意處理好“議”，議是敘述點睛之筆，所以議不能為主，議要恰到好處，使文章的主題得到升華，使讀者更能理解和品味出文章的主旨來。

（一）何謂“夾敘夾議”？

把議論穿插于具體的敘述和形象的描寫之中，就是夾敘夾議。

（二）“夾敘夾議”適合哪些文體？

記敘類(記敘文、散文)

議論類(議論文)

1、文章中的議論的作用：用議論深化主題，揭示自己的思想、看法。

2、“敘”與“議”的關系：“敘”是“議”的基礎，“議”是“敘”的深化。

（三）記敘類文章之記敘文

要使記敘文有動人的感染力，必須：不能只是單純記述事情，要與議論、抒情等結合如何處理記敘文中的“夾敘夾議”？

1、記敘和議論的結合是有機的。二者不能相互脫鉤。記敘為主，議論為適當的提煉、概括和升華。

2、合理安排議論的位置。

用在全文或一個大層次的開頭，起提示、概括文章內容、表明作者思想、立場而展開下文的作用。

夾敘夾議”既是一種寫作方法，又是寫作的一項基本技能，掌握了這種技能，對寫好各類散文和議論文有著重要意義。縱觀近年來的高考作文，許多得高分的考生，大都善于運用“夾敘夾議”的手法。在作文教學實踐中，可嘗試著讓學生多寫一些“夾敘夾議”的語段，收到了很好的效果。這種語段寫作訓練可分兩步進行。

第一步，指導寫好“夾敘夾議”中的“敘”。

[設計簡說] 作文，不僅紀錄我們的生活經歷，紀錄我們對生活的觀察，同時還紀錄我們對生活的認識，因此，好作文不僅有“敘”——敘得生動，而且還有“議”——議得深刻。“夾敘夾議” 就是敘事和議論穿插進行，寫法上靈活多變，作者可以自由自在表情達意。

[作文題]

世界，充滿了七彩陽光；生活，回響著動人的樂章。是什么曾撥動你的心弦？是新綠的小草？是母親的微笑？是叢飛的歌聲？??那么把你心中的歌唱出來吧。請以“我要為_____唱首歌”為題作文。要求：將題目補充完整然后作文。[作文背景] 生活本來就是平常的、普通的、甚至是平淡的，但是，如果用心品味，如果能從中品味出真善美，并生動地表現出來；能從一件平凡的小事中，獲得特別的體味，并抒寫出自己的一份獨特的感受來；能從一處平常的景色里，發現大自然的魅力，并表達出自己一些真切的認識來，那么你的作文就是很有意義的了——不僅讓自己重溫了生活中珍貴的影像，再次品味了幸福的滋味，而且還給別人以啟迪——這是很了不起的。

[作文指導

（一）] 還記得《濟南的冬天》嗎？那是老舍先生為自己生活過的古城唱的歌；你一定還記得《背影》吧，那是朱自清先生為父愛唱的歌；鏗鏘的《安塞腰鼓》你一定沒忘吧，那是為蓬勃的

親情,它是一劑良藥,能治愈心中的創傷;親情,它是一個港灣,能容納漂流的小船;親情,它是一雙大手,能撫平情感的挫折.小時候,親情就是母親溫暖的懷抱,父親寬厚的脊梁,幼小的心靈里能充分感到親情的溫暖與無私.那時的親情是生病時的探望與呵護, 頓挫時的鼓勵與支持,也是得意忘形時的棒喝??是親情的力量支撐著我們慢慢長大,漸漸成熟.長大了,親情便是一盞明燈,照亮了前進的道路,同時,它也是一個避風港, 給飄泊的游子一個平靜的港灣.這時,母親的鼓勵與父親的關懷就是激勵我們前進的永恒動力.親情是無形的，沒有人能夠說清楚它是什么樣子；親情是無償的，它不會讓你為它付出任何代價；親情是無價的，世上沒有什么事物的可以價格比得上它；親情是無私的，世上沒有東西比她更能犧牲自己；親情是無盡的，你的一生無時無刻不在體會到它的存在.如果你是一粒種子，親情就是土壤;如果你是一株小草，親情就是大樹;如果你是一艘小船，親情就是燈塔；如果你是一條小河，親情就是大海.親情是春季綿綿的細雨;親情是夏季陣陣的清風;親情是秋季收獲的喜悅;親情是冬季希望的曙光.親情是這喧囂的世界之中的桃源,親情是無邊沙漠之中的綠洲,親情是絕望之中的一絲希望??親情,能時刻給人溫暖,予人快樂,讓人明白,在這人情冷暖,世態炎涼的世間,還有一直對我們不離不棄,始終如一的東西存在.??

親情是山頂的積雪，簡潔卻永恒；親情是河底的流水，輕柔卻又悠長；親情是海上的那一輪落日，纏綿卻又絢爛；親情是古老的碑文，模糊卻又永恒!親情,超越了時空，編織了人生最美麗的彩虹.友情似清水·美酒

月光淡淡，清風徐徐，獨自在河畔；水波蕩漾，花香四溢，友人在遠方。

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仰頭看去，浩瀚夜空只剩一輪圓月，對天問道：燦爛星空為何只剩月光？人各有志，各奔四方。盈盈月光，我掬一杯最清的，灑向夜空，月光好似珍珠一般，帶著一縷清風的清爽，月光的澄澈，飄落到我的臉上。花朵的芳香，縈繞在我的身旁，讓人感到一種非常的溫暖，無限的愜意。

友情好似清水，它沒有世俗的雜質、也不需要絢麗的顏色，更不需要改變它的味道。清澈、純潔、真誠是它的本質，有了這些，這清水般的友情就足夠了。不要讓它建立在權力、富貴、榮華之上，正如圣人所說“君子與君子以同道為朋，小人與小人以同利為友”。不要人為的去為他制造一個驚心動魄的過程，真正的友情是建立在純自然的基礎上的，什么也無法改變它，正如詩句所說“海內存知己，天涯若比鄰”。更不要再好友離別時，大肆為好友餞行，以示彼此的友誼。那樣就使友誼失去了他本身的意義，只需要一聲簡單的送語一句安慰便可，正如古人所言“莫愁前路無知己，天下誰人不知君。”

友情似清水，淡淡之中已將我們彼此緊緊相連。

一陣風刮起，帶起塵沙，慢慢睜開眼，看一人獨自在夜光下暢飲。昂首吟道“舉杯邀明月，對影成三人。”我走近看罷，正是被人們稱為詩仙的李白。我慢慢坐下，輕聲問到為何如此？“好友離去，知音難覓，怎能不愁？”斟一杯美酒與太白共飲，美酒的幽香隨風飄去，一直飄到那多愁的月亮上去，看看太白的愁容，月亮的光芒，我體會到了“我寄愁心與明月，隨風直到夜郎西”的那種寂寞與思念,也懂得了“千金易得，知音難覓”的孤獨與無奈，百感交加只得舉杯和太白對飲。友情正向這美酒，時間越久，味道則越香純。而這美酒的原料正是兩顆真誠的心和那來之不易的緣分。無論我們在哪里，只要我們的心還在一起，這美酒就會不斷的釀下去，而且會越釀越香、越釀越純，永遠都不會變質。有人說友情就像濃茶，香濃過后就只剩下平淡和無味；但你是否聽過“人生得一知己已足以”有人說友情只是一種無聊的感覺，時間會將一切沖淡；但你是否聽過“相知無遠近，萬里尚為鄰”。

友情似美酒，越久越舊，友情則越香純，越濃厚。

我愛這清水般的友情，它使我懂得“友情是人生的調味料，也是人生的止痛藥”。生活不能缺少朋友也萬不能少了友情，人生若能得一知己，死而無憾。

我也愛這美酒般的友情，它使我明白“若知四海皆兄弟，何處相逢非故人”，真正的友情是用兩個人的心筑起的銅墻鐵壁，固若金湯。

友情似清水、美酒，它洗滌了我的心靈，帶走了我的不快。我重視朋友，但更重視我們彼此之間清水、美酒般的友情。讓清水的友情洗去煩惱，讓美酒的友情飄滿人間。

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1.生活因挫折更精彩

在人生這所學校中，挫折是一門必修課。

這門課增加了我們的勇氣;增強了我們的意志;堅定了我們的信念，使我們更堅強、更勇敢、更樂觀……我有這樣的親身體驗。

我愛好民樂，喜歡琵琶。剛學它時，我遇到了許多大大小小的挫折。這些挫折幾乎將我打倒，一度我準備放棄琵琶。當我心灰意冷時，一次成功的登臺演出，使我得到了許多人的好評。

我笑了，這次成功使我懂得了挫折的美麗，明白了如果生活中沒有挫折，生活就平淡得好似一杯白開水;如果生活中沒有挫折，像一望無垠的沙漠，沒有一點起伏，那么生活又有什么意義呢? 也許，你還在搖頭，說這些并不能說服你，那么請看貝多芬。貝多芬雙耳失聰，要知道，音樂家失去了聽覺就像駕駛員失去了眼睛。但他卻忍受著病痛的折磨，以一句“我要扼住命運的咽喉，決不讓命運使我屈服”激勵著自己，繼續在音樂領域里奮斗，他創作出了不朽名曲《第九交響樂》。這不僅使他的生活有了美妙的旋律，也為全世界喜歡音樂的人們帶去了精彩的生活與美的感受。

司馬遷獄中寫《史記》;吳承恩在科舉中屢遭挫折，但他并沒有放棄，寫出了《西游記》;一生不得志，生活貧困的蒲松齡創作出了中國著名的文言短篇小說集《聊齋志異》;魯迅在黑暗勢力的迫害下，仍能寫出眾所周知的《彷徨》、《吶喊》……還有全身癱瘓的奧斯特洛夫斯基和他的《鋼鐵是怎樣煉成的》;因患小兒麻痹癥而終身殘疾的小提琴王子帕爾曼……

當這一個個活生生的實例展現在你面前時，你還搖頭嗎?你還認為挫折僅僅是阻擋你前進的障礙嗎? 其實，生活似大海，挫折就似大海中的波瀾，賦予大海以壯麗與神秘;生活如藍天，挫折如藍天中的白云，星星點點，卻布滿天空;生活像一張白紙，挫折則像一支支畫筆，為生活這張白紙描繪出美麗的圖畫;生活是一個樂章，挫折則是這樂章中一個個跳動的音符，奏響的優美樂章……

假如你選擇了藍天，就不要渴望風和日麗;假如你選擇了陸地，就不要渴望大陸平坦;假如你選擇了海洋，就不要渴望一帆風順。讓我們勇敢地面對挫折，生活因為有了挫折而更加精彩!2.歲月痕跡

時間匆匆，轉眼中華人民共和國已經成立62周年，她經歷風風雨雨，卻始終保持這她那份堅強與毅力，沒有人知道她是如何度過那些心酸的日子，像無數的惡魔在身邊，像千只螞蟻在吞噬，這一切的一切只有經歷過風雪的她才能懂得，我為她驕傲，為她鼓掌。

至新中國成立初期，好多事情都讓我們的祖國媽媽頭痛，面對這強大的外敵與不斷的內部斗爭，在看外強中干的自己，鮮血已經流很多了，但自己的孩子卻不能得到基本的滿足，她在心中發誓：一定要將生產提升上去，讓孩子得到足夠的溫飽。她開始引進新的技術與不斷培養人才，也許時間不是問題，但技術卻在不斷創新。在很長的時間中，她迷惘過，更傷心過。于是，她踏遍祖國的每一個地方，開始不斷深入研究，讓每個地區因地制宜，發展自己的潛力。到1978年，從改革開放，她明白了自己這條路是走對了，讓他國了解自己，更可以學習別國的文化技術，增加國與國之間的了解。這條路走的很順利，很快我們的祖國從貧困中走了出來，人們的生活水平變好了，經濟水平得到了提升，她有