第一篇：英語六級作文強化解析—寫作三大原則及實例

英語六級作文強化解析—寫作三大原則及實例

寫作的三大原則：

第一條原則：vary(變化、多樣)

第二條原則：input(輸入、投入)

語言學習的五種技能：聽(listening)、說(speaking)、讀(reading)、寫(writing)、譯(translating)。

第三條原則：practise(練習)

寫作出題分析

一、出題內容

六級考試的作文內容為社會、文化或日常生活的一般常識，不涉及知識面過廣、專業性太強的內容。具體說來可以分為兩個方面：

(1)關于大學生的話題：2007年1月6級作文

(2)關于社會問題的話題：2006年6月6級作文

二、出題形式

英語六級考試作文的出題方式有：命題作文，看圖畫或圖表作文，根據所給文章(英文或中文)寫出文章摘要或大意，給出關鍵詞作文等。

根據具體特點六級考試作文可以分為以下五個類型：對立觀點型、解決問題型、諺語警句型、圖表圖畫型、應用寫作型。

(一)對立觀點型

2000年6月

Directions: For this part, you are allowed 30 minutes to write a composition on the topic Is a Test of Spoken English Necessary? The First sentence has already been written for you.You should write at least 120 words, and you should base your composition on the outline(given in Chinese)below: 1.很多人認為有必要舉行英語口語考試，理由是....。.2.也有人持不同意見，....。.3.我的看法和打算

(二)解決問題型

2003年12月

Directions: For this part, you are allowed thirty minutes to write a short essay entitled Reduce Waste on Campus.You should write at least 150 words following the outline given below:

1.有些大學校園浪費的現象日益嚴重

2.浪費的危害

3.杜絕浪費，從我做起

2000年1月

Directions: For this part, you are allowed thirty minutes to write a composition on the topic How I Finance My College Education.You should write at least 120 words, and base your composition on the outline(given in Chinese)below:

1.上大學的費用(tuition and fees)可以通過多種途徑解決。

2.哪種途徑適合我(說明理由)。

1998年1月

Directions: For this part, you are allowed thirty minutes to write a composition on the topic My View on Fake Commodities.You should write at least 120 words, and base your composition on the outline(given in Chinese)below:

1.假冒偽劣商品的危害

2.怎樣杜絕假冒偽劣商品

(三)諺語警句型

1997年1月

Directions: For this part, you are allowed thirty minutes to write a composition on the topic Haste Makes Waste.You should write at least 120 words and you should base your composition on the outline(given in Chinese)below。

1.為什么“欲速則不達”？

2.舉例說明。

(四)圖表圖畫型

2006年6月

2003年9月

2003年6月

2002年6月

1996年6月

1992年1月

1991年6月

(五)應用寫作型

2005年12月

2004年6月

2002年1月

2001年6月

三、時間與字數

英語六級考試作文要求在30分鐘內寫出一篇不少于150詞的文章。

平均一行的合理字數為8-10個單詞，六級寫作最合理字數為180左右。

30分鐘的合理安排：5(審題和構思)+20(正文)+5(檢查)

六級寫作改卷分析

應對改卷的五大策略

1、字跡清楚，段落明朗

2、內容完整，緊扣提綱

3、首句正確，再求閃光

4、先總后分，連詞用上

5、語言簡練，內容得當

具體改卷示例

實例一

2003年1月真題

④Now in our society, many people are not honest in doing soming.We often can meet with soming happened cause by people who are not honest.For example, Now we take the bus need carry cents own, and when you upstairs the bus, you should put the cent into the money box.Every people do that, but some of the people put the other things instead the cents.For another example, it is more normal that in the exams we can always find some students see others。

I consider that every people should be honest.As a people, honest should be first, because it can make us to be increase and make our socity develop.In doing every thing we should be honest all, study, word, life and so on.If you are honest, every people will be friend to you, and who will regard you are good people.But if you don’t be honest, people must unwilling to trath with you.So if you are want to be a good people, remember honest first。

⑤Nowadays, many people choose not to be honest in our modern society.We almost can find such things every day of our life: some students cheat in the exam for higher marks;some corporations tell wrong data to the public in order to get more investment;and some doctors treat their patients with unnecessary and expensive medicines in order to make money, sometimes damaged the patients’ health, even their life。

Seeing this situation.I think it must be changed.Being honest will benefit not only others, but also ourselves.First, your honesty will make others willing to trust you.Second, being honest can lead you to face your problem bravely, which helps to solve it.And the last, honest surely helps to make the society more harmony.So.I think everyone should start to be honest and everyone should have the idea that our society can not do without honesty。

實例二

1999年6月真題

Directions: For this part, you are allowed 30 minutes to write a composition on the topic Reading Selectively or Extensively? You should write at least 120 words and you should base your composition on the outline(given in Chinese)below:

1.有些人認為讀書要有選擇

2.有些人認為應當博覽群書

3.我的看法

①When it comes to reading, some people think that reading selectively is a good way, but some other people do not agree with them, they think that reading extensively is better。

Those people, who think that reading selectively is better, believe that good books are as many as bad books.Those good books can give us pleasure and knowledge, while those bad books can only lead us to the wrong way.So, they suggest that we should only choose the good books to read and never touch the bad books.But, the other people, who hold that reading extensively is better, think that one kind of books can only give us one aspect of knowledge.Even the best book only contains one field of information.So, they can easily come to the conclusion that “to know more, to read more”.So they believe that reading extensively is better。

To my point, we should choose good books to read and read good books as many as possible.By this way, we can increase the quality and quantity of reading.(11分)

注：when it comes to 當談到??的時候

When it comes to reading, opinions differ from person to person。

Those people who think that reading selectively is better believe that good books are as many as bad books。

可以表示“認為”：argue, claim, assert, hold, maintain.但這些詞一般跟在 第三人稱后面。

But 改為 However

the 去掉

to my point 改成 in my opinion / in my view / As far as I am concerned ②I think reading not only selectively but also extensively.Because the two sides are not contradict.Our time is limited.So we can not read every book in the world.However, we will not be interested in every book.We should read those books may be useful to ours, read those books which we like.But those books which we choose must be extensively so it can give ours all kinds of knowledge, news and so on, it also make ours become a wise man.On the one hand reading selectively let ours not waste our time which it is limitted.Moreover it can emphasis among all books that we can read.On the other hand reading extensively can deal with all kinds of need in our life.They are all useful to ours.(5分)

③Most people thought that read books should have been selectived.But others belived reading extentively was correction。

Selective books or reading extensively? Sure, you can choice one from previous ideas, on one hand, There are too book to read for us.We should choose those which we intrested, and it would be helpful for us。

On another hand.Someone’s intresting was wide.Each book could bring you specific contain we couldn’t reading at only one level。

I confirmed all of these ideas were good but weren’t wise。

As a reader, the main task is to discover more and more books the second task is to held some which wonderful and helpful for us.Don’t treat these books with rackless abandon。

The best technology of reading is connect.(2分)④How should we read? Should we read selectively or extensively? Everyone has his own view。

Some people think we should read selectively.They argue that with the development of modern science and technology, more and more books are published.It is impossible for us to read all the books.What’s more, there are many bad books that are poisonous to our mind, and we shouldn’t read them.Since we can’t read all the books and we shouldn’t read bad books, we must read selectively。

But others may not agree.They emphasize that today’s society is not what it was.If one man has many kinds of knowledge he’ll have more chances to succeed.If a man knows much in one field but knows nothing in other fields, he may be useless.Since we must have many kinds of knowledge, we must read extensively.Who’s right? I think both of them have something right.But I think we should read extensively first.We should read books in many fields, and read selectively in one field.(14分)

注：more and more 可改為 an increasing number of

⑤ Some people think reading shall be choosed.Because some books are good to hummen beings and some books are harmful to people。

Some people think that men shoud read books widely.Because wide reading can help man get much knowledge.And man can use it to change the world。

It is my point that reading must be selectively.Because reading is important to man.Some books can help man but some books can lead some people to crime.It can be seen in the newspapers and watched on TV.We can make full use of some good books and gain more useful knowledge.It can make our life more beauiful.We must give up those unhelpful books.They are not good to us.Reading them is wasting time and money.So reading selectively is an important part in reading.(8分)

實例三

2003年1月真題

Directions: For this part, you are allowed thirty minutes to write a composition on the topic It Pays to Be Honest.You should write at least 150 words and base your composition on the outline(given in Chinese)below:

1.當今社會上存在著很多不誠實的現象。

2.誠實利人利己，做人應該誠實。

It Pays to Be Honest

①In our modern social life, there are many examples around us show many people are cheated.Advertisements cheat people, salesmen cheat people, even one’s closest friends cheat him or her.So many heartbreaks are heard everyday that we cannot help asking: where is our honest exist? Everybody is taught honest in the primary school or even in the kindergarten.Honesty does good not only to ourselves, but to others as well.If we are honest to others.We will be happier and be in a better mood.Otherwise, we’ll feel guilt at last.To a company and its advertisement, honesty will bring it more consumer and more profit.If we cheat others, friends will never believe you and they will leave you alone.To a company, no consumer will buy your product again。

So, as the above is said, it pays to be honest.Let’s create a morally outstanding social。

注：show改為showing或 在show前加 that

honest 前應加上to be

as the above is said 正確語序為 as is said above

②Although honesty is believed to be a virtue, there are still dishonest people in our society.For example, some businessmen sell fake product to their consumers;some students cheat in the exams。

Dishonest people are short-sighted.Those who sell fake products may make money at first, but consumers won’t buy their products any more.As a result, they will lose their fortune or even be sent to prison.By contrast, honest people gain a lot.Those who always tell truth or keep to their promise not only let others trust them but gain respect from other people as well.Such persons are sure to have a lot of good friends.Because they are trustable and respectable, everyone is eager to make friends with them.Besides, it is easier for a person with a good record to get a good job.Generally speaking, every employer wants his employees to be honest.So we can say that anyone who is honest will be paid back later。

In a word, honesty wins trust, respect and honor.So it is important that we should be honest。

注：product應改為復數形式

③With the development of modern economic and industry, competitive is becoming more and more obvious.At the same time, the performance of dishonest is becoming more and more clearly。

Nowadays, there are many dishonest performance in our society.For example, some people found that he saled goods had past the preservation date.Not throw them away, they revised the perservation date, and saled them again after several days.Another case in the point, a pair of shoes was made from goat.However, in order to sale at a high price, the salers would say they were made from cow which has good quality。

From the foregoing, we can see that dishonest dose not only harm to yourselves but also harm to others.And it is no use only realise the harmness of dishonest.We should be honest from now on and be honest in our daily life.It is only that people all over the world are honest them our country will be beautiful and wealthy。

注：economic 改為 economy

industry 改為 society

competitive 改為 competition

obvious 改為 fierce(激烈的)

more and more 最好改為 increasingly

phenomenon/phenomena 現象

behavior/action 行為

fur 皮毛 skin 皮膚

leather 皮革

hide 獸皮

from 改為 of

第二篇：2010年12月英語六級寫作及解析匯總

2010年12月英語六級寫作范文及解析匯總

2010年12月英語六級作文題目

六級作文題目：

1.目前高校排名相當盛行

2.對于這種做法，人們看法不一

3.我認為??

2010年12月英語六級考試作文范文高分版

2010年12月英語六級考試作文范文高分版

For those university students-to-be, choosing their ideal school is never an easy job, but luckily, different authorities come up with the university ranking to help!Top students shall choose the top schools high on the list and vice versa.Complicated issue becomes easy numerical comparison, yet the real problem stays there, can the numerical ranking tell you the status quo of these universities? Are these “authorities” producing the ranking authoritative enough to make the judgments? Let’s take a serious look at the issue before we jump to the conclusion whether university ranking is good or bad.We have to admit that because of historical reasons, most of the 1950s-1960s parents were denied higher education and this cruel fact makes them even more eager to give their children high education even though they have no idea of what university education is all about.The ranking helps them to make decisions based on their simple idea of better ranking means better jobs in future, and therefore better income!It is pathetic that they interpret knowledge and wisdom in such a way yet it is even more pathetic that there are so-claimed well-educated people making up all the ranking and get the ranking published to mislead them!

2010年12月英語六級寫作范文

It is a not-uncommon social phenomenon that the university rankings are especially prevalent in our country.For example, universities are measured by scale, academic achievements or the number of papers published in famous magazines.As to this issue, opinions vary from person to person.Some people hold that university ranking dramatically promotes the development of university in various fields.But others maintain that university ranking also leads to some undesirable consequences such as academic fraud even to deceive people.As far I am concerned, every coin has two sides.On one hand, University ranking does encourage the development and growth of colleges.Such growth– the grand libraries, splendid stadiums and fruitful academic achievements, has caught the attention of the world.We’re impressed by these signs of our education’s tour to the 21st century.On the other hand, we have to pay attention to an unexpected phenomenon that some people have ignored the objectivity of university ranking.Take South university of science and technology of china for an example, this university occupies the second position in some university rankings.In those rankings, it is superior to Peking University and Tsinghua university.In a word, we should inspire the advantages of university and abandon its disadvantages.考試吧點點版：2010年12月英語六級考試作文范文

1、當今社會，高校排名很流行

2、個人看法不同

3、我自己的觀點

Nowadays , university and college ranking has become increasingly popular thoughout the nation.According to the survry conducted by China Daily , an estimated 85$ universities are closely concerned about the ranking.In other words, we cannot fail to notice the obvious trend that university ranking has become a social focus , triggering a wide concerns across the nation, especially fromschool campuses。

A host of individuals are divided over this issue about university ranking.an army of folks deem that we are supposed to be concerned about the ranking because the ranking is the sole standard of measuring the school’s comprehensive level.Plus, when choosing the university for their kids, a growing number of parents take the ranking into account.However, others maintain that it’s not a wise and rational idea to view the university ranking as the only standard ,put in another way , we should not over-value the ranking.The ranking is the outward style of the university。

On my personal level, however, ranking matters much to a university , but enhancing the teaching and comprehensive quality is on the top of university’s priority, ranging from the faculty to teaching methods to teaching instruments and so forth.Only in these ways can we bulid up fast-paced and flagship university smoothly。

考試吧海天版：2010年12月英語六級作文范文

1、當今社會，高校排名很流行

2、個人看法不同

3、我自己的觀點

Nowadays , University and college ranking has become increasingly popular thoughout the nation.According to the survry conducted by China Daily , an estimated 85$ universities are closely concerned about the ranking.In other words, we cannot fail to notice the obvious trend that university ranking has become a social focus , triggering a wide concerns across the nation, especially rom on and off school campus.A host of individuals are divided over this issue about university ranking.an army of folks deem that we are supposed to be concerned about the ranking because the ranking is the sole standard of measuring the school’s comprehensive level , plus, when choosing the university for their kids, a growing number of parents take the ranking into account.However, others maintain that it’s not a wise and rational idea to view the university ranking as the only standard,put in another way , we should not over-value the ranking.The ranking is the outward style of the university.On my ersonal level, however, ranking matters much to a university , but enhancing the teaching and comprehensive quality is on the top of university’s priority, ranging from the faculty to teaching methods to teaching instruments and so forth.Only in these ways can we bulid up fast-paced and flagship university smoothly.考試吧：2010年12月英語六級考試作文范文及解析

My View on University Ranking

In recent years, all kinds of University Ranking Lists can be found on some educational websites, or newspapers.The ranking standards also vary.These lists have great influence on students.They are even becoming the only scale to evaluate the colleges and universities。

People hold different views toward this phenomenon.Some believe that these lists help the students a lot, especially for those who will choose their university.While some other protest vigorously.In their points, the list is really ridiculous and harmful.In my view, the university ranking may have its own reference values, but its disadvantages overweigh its values。

For those university-students-to-be, they are supposed to choose the school according to his or her own situation, but not the so-called Ranking List.What’s more, how about the university students? How do they feel about themselves when they see the ranking? The list may become some intangible shackles for them if their own school ranks poorly。

In a nutshell, there is no easy method to rank these universities, but the Ranking, only helps students ignore the essentials, namely, their ninety-nine percent perspiration。

此次六級作文的自由度很大，看似給出了提綱，實際上具體的觀點全靠個人發揮。第一段需要點明大學排名這個現象，第二段需要鋪陳不同人的觀點，第三段要陳述自己的觀點。

大學排名這個題目，實際上涉及到了對了大學的理解，對于大學排名標準的理解，以及對于大學排名的目的的理解。而這件事更加離不開中國具體的國情，新中國 50年代人至今受教育的情況，90后擇校的情況，目前大學的情況，考生發揮的空間可以縱橫數十年的教育史，并且可以深入探討教育的本質。

當然，對于大多數考生來說，湊滿150個字萬歲!那么，模板又可以派上用場了。

第三篇：2014年6月全國大學英語六級寫作及解析

2014年6月全國大學英語六級寫作范文及解析

【作文題目一】

For this part, you are allowed 30 minutes to write an essay explaining why it is unwise to judge a person by their appearance.You can give explain to illustrate your point.You should write at least 150 words but no more than 200 words.【解析】

本次作文話題是關于“Never judge a person by his appearance 不要以貌取人”。對于這個話題，考生一定都不陌生，這在大家平常的作文訓練中都會涉及或碰到。

此類作文的思路與結構也很清晰：首段，可以引用一兩句名言，引出不要以貌取人的觀點。中間段落從兩方面闡述原因或以貌取人的敝處。末段，重申觀點，也可給出建議。

【參考范文一】

There is an old saying that people never judge a book from its cover.From my point of view, this saying also applies to our attitudes towards others: never judge a person from their appearance.Because you never know one person’s true merits if only judging from their appearance.It is true that an attractive appearance is of great significance not only for daily life but also for the job.However, it is unwise to judge one person by the appearance for the following reasons.On the one hand, with the advancement of science technology and medical level, people

can transform their surface by all means.On the other hand, the appearance should not be the merely criteria for judging an individual, considering that are more important factors, including Courteous, kind-hearted, honest and so on.In conclusion, it is unadvisable to judge a person by their appearance.That’s why I assert that we should pay more attention to one's inward and place high value on inner cultivation.【參考范文二】

As a prevailing saying goes,” Don’t judge a person by appearance”.Undoubtedly, it reflects a current phenomenon that fewer individuals seem to attach due importance to the significance of intrinsic factors.However, from my own perspective, we should put more emphasis on the quality rather than appearance.Taking a look around, we can find examples too numerous to list.The best illustration might be some currently over-packaged products in the markets.To put it more exactly, we may easily notice that the delicate packaged products may turn out to be of inferior quality.Exactly, it is the intrinsic factors that enable us to make reasonable choices.In short, laying a solid foundation is crucial if we want to make achievements in our studies or work, or indeed in any other aspects of our lives.And what we should bear in mind is that essence matters most

instead of “the first sight”.【作文題目二】

題目：It is unwise to put all eggs in one basket.As a common saying goes，“It is unwise to put all eggs in one basket.”Placing all eggs in one basket means focus all our attention on one thing and fix all our hope on one thing.However, It is wrong and reasonless.Why placing all eggs in one basket is wrong? Placing all eggs in one basket tends to reduce the odds of success.By focusing on one thing, people will surely improve their efficiency and proficiency.However, they will also overlook other resources and possibilities，thus，the likelihood of success will be lower.Take Jack, one of my best friends, as a case in point: he started to hunt for jobs in his senior year.Compared with other students who chose different kinds of jobs, he aimed at state-owned firms alone.Unfortunately, getting a decent job in state-owned firms is really hard for him.At last, when others got a job, he was still on the way to his interviews.suppose he choose jobs in a wider range and “place all eggs in different baskets”，he could have gotten a job much easier.Putting all eggs in one basket in unwise, a truth which is applicable to many situations.As a college student，we should endeavor to master more skills, accumulate different experience and make friends with diverse people.參考譯文：

俗語有云：“把雞蛋放在一個籃子里是不明智的”。將雞蛋放在一個籃子里意味著將我們的注意力集中在一件事情上，將我們的所有希望寄托在一件事情上。然而，這是錯誤且不理智的。

為什么將所有雞蛋放在一個籃子里是錯誤的？首先，將雞蛋放在一個籃子里，往往會減少成功的概率。聚焦一件事情，人們確實會提高效率和熟練程度。然而，人們也會因此忽略其他的資源和可能性，因此成功的可能性反而降低了。比如說，以我最好的朋友之一杰克為例，他在大四那年開始找工作。與其他找不同的工作的同學相比，他只選擇國企。不幸的是，在國企找到一份合適的工作著實不易。最終，當別人都找到工作的時候，他還在趕著去面試呢。假設他再更廣的范圍內選擇工作或者說將“雞蛋放在不同的籃子里”?；蛟S他可以更加容易的找到工作。

將雞蛋放在不同的籃子里是不明智的，這個真理適用于不同的場合。作為一名大學生，我們應該努力去掌握更多的技能，積累不同的經驗以及與不同的人交朋友。

【作文題目三】

看到什么、聽到什么就立刻得出結論是不明智的。

Living in an age when the adolescents are lack of the necessary guidance and supervision, we can never fail to figure out the fact that teenagers are become especially self-conscious.Under this circumstance,the youngsters are more likely to believe in what they have listened or seen instead of thinking twice before drawing their conclusions, which is pathetically and undoubtedly considered controversial or even unreasonable.The reasons why I insist on the viewpoint that we should never directly and irresponsibly come to conclusions only by listening or seeing mainly lie in the following two aspects.To begin with, it is a invariable law to every existence in the world that nothing will stay still even for just one second.So are the things happening around us.What we see or listen may be just some particular period of the development of things, which proves unstable and changeable.In addition, the perspectives we conclude just through seeing or listening are usually one-sided.Drawing conclusions rashly is not objective enough to make our statements persuasive.To sum up, it is unwise for us to define any thing as what we assume or imagine at first sight.Only by our serious thinking and accurate analyzing can we come up with more rational and reasonable conclusions.

第四篇：典型病句實例解析三

典型病句實例解析三

1.下列各句沒有語病的一項是()A.“9·11”恐怖事件造成美國人民生靈涂炭，同時也帶來了經濟的滑坡。B.我的拙見，歸根結蒂一句話：掙錢才是硬道理。C.近10年來，長江源頭生態破壞的嚴重情況令人堪憂。

D.本書作者希望這本書能對讀者在學習英語句型方面起舉一反三的作用。2.下列各句表意明確的一項是()A.通過家長學校的學習，家長們都認識到不適當的管教孩子是不行的。

B.在英國，一只狗進一次美容院的花費，相當于一個普通工人月工資的三四倍。

C.那年，我響應黨的號召，瞞著你奶奶和你姑姑毅然到大西北當了新型農民。從此，就改變了我的人生。D.奶奶看到我倆非常高興，就急忙從炕上下來，拉住我們的手問這問那。3.下列各句沒有語病的一項是()A.糧庫主任的失職，使100噸小麥霉爛變質，上級領導為了嚴肅法紀，決定給他記過處分，并賠償一萬元經濟損失。

B.樓上戶主是知識分子，但常有餿泡飯臨窗潑下;平房里的住戶大多是環衛工人，卻經常向外扔爛菜葉。C.為了全面推廣利用菜籽餅或棉籽餅喂豬，加速發展養豬事業，這個縣舉辦了三期飼養員技術培訓班。D.這個被評為先進單位的曙光電線，是由三個街道生產小組合并起來的。4.下列各句沒有語病的一項是()A.山西省煤炭的蘊藏量是我國最豐富的地區之一。

B.三張小方桌拼在一起，作為會議桌，以供接待客人和開會之用。C.她9歲起就在報刊上發表作品，并被一些文集選錄。

D.下崗職工有效地組織起來，把飲食、縫紉、拆洗等福利事業興建得很好。5.下列各句沒有語病的一項是()A.分小班能針對性地解決學生存在的各種問題。

B.作者著力刻劃了兩位主要人物，這兩位主要人物的一言一行，一舉一動都體現了作者對這兩類不同女性的深刻理解和深切同情。

C.這個經驗值得文教工作者，特別是中小學教師的重視。D.母親的貧血和吞咽困難均已恢復，這多虧王大夫高超的醫術。[page] 6.下列每組中的兩句話所表達的意思不相同的一組是()A.①去年我差點考上北大。②去年我差點沒考上北大。B.①中國足球隊差點輸了。②中國足球隊差點沒輸。C.①小張差點買了那張假畫。

②小張差點沒買了那張假畫。D.①雨天路滑，好幾個人差點摔倒。②雨天路滑，好幾個人差點沒摔倒。7.下列各句沒有語病的一項是()A.由于蒲松齡所處的時代和出身的局限，不能不在他的作品中有所反映。

B.《手機三包規定》深受廣大消費者歡迎，因為它強化了人們的自我保護意識，使消費者的權益得到最大限度的保護。

C.3月17日，六名委員因受賄丑聞被驅逐出國際奧委會。第二天世界各大報紙關于這起震驚國際體壇的事件都作了詳細報道。

D.對科學問題上的事非之爭，不應采取壓服的方式，尤其不能搞文字獄一類的東西，歷史上凡是這樣做了的，沒有一個會有好結果。8.下列各句沒有語病的一項是()A.一連幾個酷夏，縣委都動員大批機關干部和科技人員到農業第一線去，同歷史上罕見的洪澇災害作斗爭。B.這次籃球比賽，真想不到我們班會奪得冠軍，而且一連戰勝六個強勁對手。C.這件事在廣大師生中廣泛地引起了議論。

D.不少在科學研究上有杰出成就的人，是在物質條件十分艱苦的情況下，經過頑強刻苦的努力才獲得成功的。

9.下列各句沒有語病的一項是()A.我本想這次能在家鄉同你見面，回家后才知道你由于正忙著搞科研，不回來了。B.兩次特大臺風給廣東、福建等沿海人民造成的災害，已被黨和人民解決了。C.這個車間還建立了干部巡回檢查制度，定期到各班組檢查制度執行情況。

D.這位名聞遐邇的五官科老教授是耳、鼻、喉的克星，五官上的任何頑疾到他手里都一掃而光。10.下列各句沒有語病的一項是()A.偷車人見有人追趕反而加大油門拼命逃竄，公安人員直追到山根下才將其抓獲。，B.在群眾大會上，他那鏗鏘有力的話語，至今還響在我的耳邊。

C.最讓人高興的是，在全廠職工團結協作，日夜奮戰下，全年的生產指標終于超額完成。

D.馬教授領導的科研組研制出能燃用各種劣質煤，并且有節煤作用的劣質煤穩燃器，為節能作出了重大貢獻。[page] 11.下列各句沒有語病的一項是()A.市委采取有力措施，制止了群眾揭發少數單位違反財經制度，請客送禮的不良現象。

B.我們的祖先在這塊神奇的土地上創造了燦爛的物質文明和精神文明，形成了具有民族特色的文化傳統，為人類文明做出了貢獻。

C.實踐證明，哪個研究小組搞得好，哪里科學種田和單位面積產量就較高。

D.誰也不能否認，要是沒有邊防戰士無時無刻在保衛著祖國，我們就不可能安定地生活。12.下列各句沒有語病的一項是()A.他們在施工過程中，對每個重要的技術問題都交給群眾討論。B.那輛新進口的小轎車，最高時速可達180公里以上。

C.雖然小紅同學只說了這么簡單的一句話，但卻深刻地概括了當代中學生的風貌。D.他去世后群眾雖然懷念他，但藝術界卻不把他列為藝術家。13.下列各句沒有語病的一項是()A.讀了這篇文章，能夠使廣大讀者更加深刻地認識到沒有制約的權力必然產生腐敗這一道理。B.這本書，精裝本和普及本的價格懸殊一半多。

C.古典芭蕾舞體系能夠最大限度地體現舞蹈動作的技巧性、表現力和協調性，培養演員的體力和悟性。D.某廠擅自使用天津廠的牡丹牌商標，推銷自己的產品，是違反商標法的行為。因為侵犯了商標專用權。14.下列各句沒有語病的一項是()A.令人不可思議的是，當該地區違規操作的問題曝光以后，各地的采購員反倒蜂擁而至。B.兔子泛濫成災，糟蹋了整個牧場，使譽滿全球的澳洲綿羊成倍減少。C.公司家大業大，更要注意節省不必要的開支和不應有的浪費。D.我國向太平洋預定海域發射的首枚運載火箭圓滿成功。15.下列各句沒有語病的一項是()A.為了爭取高速度，我們必須狠抓科學技術的現代化，使它走在生產建設的前面，把我國國民經濟用先進的科學技術搞上去。

B.觀摩會上，林醫生為兩個中學生做了角膜切開矯正近視手術。C.我們無論如何不能不承認，太陽不是從東方升起西方落下的。D.請連長放心，盡管遇到多大的困難，我們也要堅決完成任務。[page] 1.選D。這是一組考“重復噦嗦”的題。A 項“生靈”即“百姓、人民”的意思，和“人民”重復。B 項“拙見”意為“謙詞，自己的見解”，和“我的”重復。C 項“堪憂”意為“令人擔憂”，和“令人”重復。

2.選B。這是一組考“表意不明”的題。A 項歧義。可理解為“需要適當的管管孩子了”。也可理解為“對孩子管得不適當(如打壞了)是不行的”。C 項歧義，是“瞞著奶奶”一個人，和姑姑一起去了大西北，還是“瞞著奶奶和姑姑” 兩個人，自己一個人去了大西北。D 項歧義，一是“我倆非常高興”，二是“奶奶看到我倆后，她自己非常高興”。

3.選D。這是一組考“成分殘缺”的題。A 項成分殘缺，應改為“并責令他賠償……”。B 項缺賓語中心詞，應改為“但常有餿泡飯臨窗潑下的行:”。C 項缺賓語中心詞，應改為“推廣利用菜籽餅或棉籽餅喂豬的技術”。4.選B。這是一組考“搭配不當”的題。A 項主謂不搭配，“蘊藏量是地區之一”不通，應改為“山西省是我國煤炭蘊藏量最豐富的地區之一”。C 項主謂不搭配，“她被文集選錄”不通，應改為“這些作品并被……”。D 項“興建事業”不搭配，應把“興建”改為“興辦”。更多相關信息請訪問中公教育

5.選B。這也是一組考“詞類或詞義誤用”的題。A 項“針對性”是名詞，不能作狀語，應改為“分小班能針對學生存在的各種問題右越餼:”。C 項“值得”為副詞，它后面必須是動詞性結構，應去淖“重視”前面的“的”。D 項應改“恢復”為“治愈”，“恢復吞咽困難”等于吃不下東西了。

6.選A。“差點”后頭如果是不希望發生的事，“差點”和“差點沒”意思一洋，都表示“沒發生”。“差點”后頭如果是希望發生的，“差點”后頭肯定形式表否定的意思，否定形式表肯定的意思。即“差點實現”是沒實現，“差點沒實現”是實現了。A 項是希望發生的事，①②表達的意思不同。B、C、D 三項都是不希望發生的事，所表達的意思相同，故選A。

7.選B。A 項濫用介詞造成沒主語，應去掉“由于”。C 項介詞不當，“關于”應改為“對于”。D 項“這樣”指代不明，是指代“壓服”還是“文字獄”? 8.選D。A 項不合邏輯，一連幾個酷夏都同洪水作斗爭就不能說是“歷史上罕見”了。B 項語序不當，應先戰勝對手后奪得冠軍。C 項語序不當，應改為“……引起了廣泛議論”。

9.選A。B 項“解決災害”搭配不當，應把“解決”改為“戰勝”。C 項結構混亂，“車間定期檢查情況”不通，應在“ 定期”前加上“干部”二字。D 項邏輯不通，“耳、鼻、喉的克星”即克掉了耳、鼻、喉。

10.選D。A 關聯詞不當，本句為承接關系而非轉折關系?！胺炊睉臑椤榜R上”。B 項介賓短語位置不對，應改為“他在群眾大會上那……”。C 項“在……上”、“在……下”中間插人的必須是各詞性成分，應改為“在全廠職工團結協作，日夜奮戰的情況”。

11.選B。A 項缺結構助詞“的”，應改為“制止了群眾揭發的……”。C 項“兩面對一面”不照應，應去掉“科學種田”。D 項“無時無刻不”等于“時時刻刻都”，應加-個“不”字。

12.選C。A 項介詞運用錯誤，應把“對”改為“把”。B 項最高時速必須是確數，應去掉“以上”二字。D 項關聯詞位置不當，應改為“雖然群眾懷念他”。

13.選C。A 項成分殘缺，缺主語，應去掉“讀了”二字。B 項“懸殊”為不及物動詞，不能帶賓語，應去掉“一半多”三字。D 項缺賓語中心詞，應改為“推銷自己產品的行為”。

14.選A。B 項數量的減少只能用分數或百分數，增加才能用倍數。C 項“一面對兩面”不照應，“節省不應有的浪費”不通。D 項“運載火箭圓滿成功”不通，圓滿成功的是“發射運載火箭”。

15.選B。A 項最后一句語序不當，應改為“用先進的科學技術把我國國民經濟搞上去”。C 項否定不當，應去掉“不是”的“不”字。D 項“盡管”應改為“不管”。

第五篇：2010商務英語BEC中級寫作實例解析

2010商務英語BEC中級寫作實例解析

隨著中國人學習英語風潮的持續升溫，擁有日常英語交流能力已經變得不足為奇，未來在就業市場上走俏的將是職業英語，即能夠用英語交流工作中的問題，比如和外國同事討論公司的市場營銷策略或者代表公司和外國公司接洽等。但是目前絕大多數學生和職場新人對于商業英語非常陌生。筆者認為，備考劍橋商務英語證書(Business English Certificate，簡稱BEC)是有志躋身于商業職場的人士熟悉商業場景、學習商業英語的最佳方法。

BEC考試的顯著特點就是把商業實際和英語運用結合起來，分成初、中、高三級(BEC Preliminary, BEC Vantage, BEC Higher)，其中BEC中級最符合廣大考生的求職需求。BEC中級考試分成聽、說、讀、寫四項考查，各占總成績1/4，其中寫作部分與聽、說、讀相比，因其考查形式固定，內容要求有限，因而最易得高分。寫作部分包含兩個部分：Part One, 備忘錄或電子郵件(Memo or Email)，占寫作成績的1/3;Part Two, 商務信件、報告或提議(Letter, Report or Proposal)，占寫作成績的2/3。兩部分相比，Part One要求簡單，較之Part Two更容易提高，本文以《劍橋BEC真題集(中級)第二輯》的Test Two, Part One為例，詳細分析Part One的寫作流程，并在最后給出BEC寫作的復習資料。樣 題

You are the Managing Director of a company whose profits have recently increased and you would like to reward staff for this.Write a memo to all staff:

Thanking them for their contribution

Explaining why profits increased

Telling them what their reward will be.Write 40~50 words

題目解讀

BEC中級寫作考試總時長 為45分鐘，根據詞數要求和分值，通常小作文寫作不超過15分鐘。應試創作可分成以下三步：1.審題構思Read & Plan(3 mins);2.寫作Write(10 mins);3.檢查Check(2 mins)。

Part One的題目背景通常是一事、兩人、三要點。本題中，最近公司利潤增長，“你”作為公司的董事總經理(Managing Director)將對全體員工(all staff)進行獎勵，備忘錄的內容需包括三個要點：感謝員工的貢獻，解釋利潤增長原因，并告之獎勵內容。正文詞數要求為40～50個詞，因為商務英語要求簡潔，詞數要求有上限，這和四、六級以及考研寫作只規定詞數下限有所區別，但實際考試時允許少量超標，比如接近60詞。

內容、結構、語言和形式

首先可根據各要點的邏輯關系調整寫作順序，比如在本題中，先解釋利潤增長的原因，再感謝員工，最后宣布獎勵。其次應針對要點簡要展開論述，比如利潤增長的原因可能是銷售量增加(the increase of sales)、成本降低(the reduction of cost)或推出新產品(the launch of the new product);而獎勵的內容經常是集體旅行(a company trip)、漲工資(an increase of salary)或發放獎金(bonus)。要點擴展應注意兩點：其一，商務交流要求具體，比如利潤的增長比去年同時段增加10%;其二，擴展內容應符合商務實際，如全體員工工資上浮50%、增加帶薪假期(paid leave)、開派對(a party)或唱卡拉

OK(Karaoke)等獎勵都是不符合商務實際的。如果確實對商務實務不熟悉，可用簡單的理由以避免出錯，比如公司業績增長的原因可以寬泛地寫成是員工的努力工作和加班(hard work and long working hours)。

結構

因為文章內容很少，總詞數只有50個詞左右，寫作時應寫成一個整體，不應出現每句一段的散文詩文章，而且不要刻意使用first和second之類的過渡詞語。

語言

Part One題目中的要點通常以三個現在分詞形式給出，寫作時通常是三句話，即針對每個現在分詞寫一句 話，平均句長在15個詞左右。備考時應針對題目中常見的分詞動詞準備相應的表達方式，盡量避免重復使用題目中的詞句即可。

解釋原因：

連詞：because, since, for, so;短語：because of, due to, owing to

表示感謝：

Thank you very much for...;I would like to thank you for...;I am very grateful for...;It was very kind of you to...獎勵：

A rise in salary of X%;A bonus of X% of your monthly salary;A trip to

Hawaii/Athens/Maldives

需要注意的是，商務英語要求正式文體，較之非正式文體，其有以下常見特點：

正式 非正式

Headquarters, September(不簡寫)H.Q.Sept.(縮寫)

schedule, discuss(精確動詞)set, talk about(寬泛動詞或詞組)

A copy has been sent.(被動語態)I sent you a copy.(主動語態)

最后需要考慮的就是備忘錄的形式。正式考試時，文字題目下方會模擬商務實際，附上備忘錄開頭片段，包括To, From, Date, Subject等細節，但是考生不必直接在片段后書寫，應該在試題紙背面寫作，寫作時不要求必須有From, To等內容，但若能準確而符合商務習慣地寫出備忘錄細節，無疑會增加文章的印象分，這里簡單介紹一下備忘錄細節的注意事項。

To: 備忘錄對象

如果具體到人，最好寫出全名，不要寫自己的真實姓名，有作弊嫌疑，尤其不能“重名”，如Bill Tom，Bill和Tom都是名(Given name)，而不是姓(Family name)，一個簡單的處理方法就是use others?name，比如男名Bill Gates, Michael Scofield, Jay Chou或女名

From: 備忘錄作者

要點同上，一般不用尊稱，只有對方不知道自己身份的時候才后綴職位名稱。

Date: 日期

BEC屬于英聯邦國家的考試，日期的寫法一般為日、月、年，比如7 December 2002，注意月份用英文而不是數字，以免和日期混淆，可以縮寫，比如將一月寫作Jan(也可以用開放標點)。

Britney Spears, Jennifer Aniston等;若顯示關系親密，還可以把名字縮寫，比如B.Gates, M.Scofield, J.Chou, B.Spears, J.Aniston等;如果寫給上級，還應該加上尊稱甚至職位，比如Mr.Bill Gates — Managing Director, Mr.Jay Chou — Art Director等;現代商務寫作中流行開放標點(Open Punctuation)，即標點不影響理解的時候可以不用，所以Mr./Ms./Mrs.后面的省略點也可以省去，簡單寫成Mr/Ms/Mrs;最好不要省去名字。

范文示例

To: All Staff

From: Bill Gates

Date: 7 December 2002

Subject: Staff Reward

The profits of our company this month went up 10% compared with the same period last year, due to your hard work and long working hours.I would like to thank you for your long devoted service.A trip to Hawaii has been arranged next month as a prize.Enjoy!